机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and clear, but a little repetitive and slightly disorganized. Start with one concise topic sentence, avoid repeating words (e.g. “mom, my mom”), and use a linking phrase to list activities. Add one specific detail about one activity to make the response more vivid.

範例: Yes — I had many opportunities as a child because my mother actively encouraged me to try new things. For example, I learned piano for three years and joined a local swim club, which helped me build discipline and make friends. I also tried basketball and inline skating, all of which I enjoyed and that broadened my interests.

建議: Good opinion and clear reason, but avoid filler ("uh") and repetition (ending with "So I think"). Begin with a direct topic sentence, use one linking phrase to introduce reasons, and give one concrete example or outcome to support your view. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because opportunities are fleeting and you learn from experience. For instance, joining a short course or club can boost your confidence and teach practical skills like teamwork or time management. Therefore, experimenting with activities often leads to personal growth and new interests.

× Yes, I think I had a lot of opportunities because mom, my mom, always supported and encouraged me to try new things, just like the students around me.

✓ Yes, I think I had a lot of opportunities because my mom always supported and encouraged me to try new things, just like the students around me.

The phrase 'mom, my mom,' is redundant and awkward. Use the possessive pronoun 'my' before 'mom' to show ownership and avoid repetition. Suggestion: write 'my mom' once for clarity and naturalness.

× So I've tried piano or swimming, playing basketball, running, inline skating, everything as well.

✓ So I tried piano and swimming, played basketball, went running, and tried inline skating as well.

Mixed verb forms and connectors create inconsistency. Use past simple to match 'I had' earlier and parallel verbs: 'tried piano and swimming, played basketball, went running, and tried inline skating.' Also replace 'or' with 'and' to indicate multiple activities.

× So I really enjoyed it.

✓ I really enjoyed them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to multiple activities; also the student previously listed several activities, so plural pronoun 'them' is appropriate. Keep past simple 'enjoyed' to match prior context.

× Yes, it's really worth it because, uh, opportunities do not come always like you have to catch them so that you can try things at that moment.

✓ Yes, it's really worth it because opportunities do not always come, so you have to seize them when they do so you can try things at that moment.

Word order and modal/phrase choice are incorrect. 'Do not always come' should be 'do not always come' (place 'always' before main verb). 'Catch them' is informal and slightly odd; 'seize them' is more natural. Also restructure into two clauses connected by 'so' for clarity.

× So I think trying things build people's experiences and confidence.

✓ So I think trying things builds people's experience and confidence.

Subject-verb agreement error: singular gerund phrase 'trying things' requires singular verb 'builds'. Also 'experiences' is better as uncountable 'experience' in this context. Use 'builds experience and confidence.'

× So I think.

✓ So I think so.

Fragment: 'So I think.' is an incomplete sentence in spoken context. Adding 'so' completes the idea ('So I think so') or better, remove the fragment. Suggestion: say 'So I think so' or end the response without the trailing fragment.