机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar and word choice, and make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word forms (e.g., 'crafts' instead of 'manualities'), and avoid unnecessary phrases. Use one or two specific examples with a linking phrase to support your statement. Limit to about 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes — I had many chances to try new activities as a child. My parents encouraged me to try sports and crafts, and at school I joined an after-school art club, which helped me build confidence and make friends.

建議: Improve sentence structure, punctuation, and word choice to make your opinion clearer and more natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, because, for instance) and specific details. Correct collocations (e.g., 'discover their strengths', 'reveals talents') and break long sentences into two to avoid run-ons.

範例: Absolutely. People should try different activities because it helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, taking a cooking class might reveal a talent you didn’t know you had and could lead to new friendships or even a career idea.

× Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to take part in new activities when I was a child.

This sentence is mostly correct grammatically, but 'as a child' is acceptable; using 'when I was a child' is slightly more natural. No grammar type from the list strictly required change, but the suggestion improves register and clarity.

× My parents always encouraged me to try new things like sports, manualities.

✓ My parents always encouraged me to try new things like sports and crafts.

'Manualities' is not standard English; the correct noun is 'crafts' or 'manual skills'. This is a word choice error and involves incorrect noun form. Replace with 'crafts' to convey hands-on activities. This fits under singular/plural and word form corrections.

× Even in my school I joined to Barbara School.

✓ Even at my school I joined Barbara School.

The verb 'join' does not take the preposition 'to' in this context; you 'join' an organization or school directly: 'joined Barbara School'. Also 'at my school' is the correct preposition. This is a sentence structure and preposition error (IDs 26 and 11), corrected to 'Even at my school I joined Barbara School.'

× Absolutely, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover their interests and strength for example trying new hobbies or course can rebel talents you didn't know you had and can lead to new friendships or career ideas.

✓ Absolutely. I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, trying new hobbies or courses can reveal talents you didn't know you had and can lead to new friendships or career ideas.

This original sentence has several issues: 'strength' should be plural 'strengths' to match 'interests' (singular/plural issue, ID 1), and it is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'Trying new hobbies or course' — 'course' should be plural 'courses' to match 'hobbies' (ID 1). 'Can rebel talents' uses the wrong verb; the correct verb is 'reveal' (word choice). Also add a comma after 'For example' and split into sentences for clarity. The modal 'should' is used correctly (ID 4) so retained. Overall corrected: '...discover their interests and strengths. For example, trying new hobbies or courses can reveal talents...'