机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and gives examples, but it is slightly repetitive, has filler words ("like", "uh"), and one or two grammatical errors (e.g., "it's helped" -> "they helped"). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, use correct tense and plural forms, and add one specific detail about how an activity helped you, linking ideas with a connector (e.g., "because", "which"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. My parents enrolled me in several extracurricular activities at school, such as dancing, football and track. These activities helped me build teamwork and discipline because football taught me cooperation while dancing improved my confidence. As a result, I felt more motivated and focused throughout my school years.

建議: Your response expresses a clear opinion and gives reasons, but it contains grammatical errors (e.g., "as they can" -> "as possible", "is not determined" -> "is not limited", "1" -> "one", "helps" -> "help"), some awkward phrasing, and repetition. To improve, state your opinion succinctly, use concise linking words ("because", "for example", "therefore"), correct verb agreement, and provide one specific example of benefit. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because personal interests and skills can change over time. For example, someone who studies engineering might also take painting classes, which can boost creativity and reduce stress. Therefore, exploring different activities can lead to new opportunities and personal growth.

× So it's helped me a lot through my extra curricular activities through my whole school journey.

✓ So it helped me a lot through my extracurricular activities during my whole school journey.

The original uses 'it's helped' which mixes contraction 'it is' with a past meaning; this is incorrect. The intended meaning refers to past experience, so simple past 'helped' is correct. Also 'extra curricular' should be one word 'extracurricular' and 'through' repeated is awkward; use 'during'.

× Yes, I think people can try many things as they can in their life because one person is not determined to do 1 particular thing in their life.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many things as they can in their life because a person is not limited to doing one particular thing in their life.

'Try many things as they can' is unidiomatic; standard phrase is 'try as many things as they can'. Use 'a person' instead of 'one person' for naturalness and 'not limited to doing one particular thing' is clearer than 'not determined to do 1 particular thing'. Also numerals should be written as words in formal speech: 'one'.

× It will helps to improve their lives skills and it will benefit people a lot.

✓ It will help to improve their life skills and will benefit people a lot.

After the modal construction 'will' the base verb should be used: 'help', not 'helps'. 'Lives skills' is incorrect; use 'life skills' (singular noun modifying 'skills'). Also removing the repeated subject 'it' in the second clause improves fluency: 'and will benefit...'.

× When I was in school, my parents signed me up for extra curricular activities like dancing, playing football and running, like that kind of sports and arts, uh, kind of things.

✓ When I was in school, my parents signed me up for extracurricular activities like dancing, playing football and running, that kind of sport and art activities.

'Extra curricular' should be 'extracurricular'. The phrase 'like that kind of sports and arts' is ungrammatical: 'sport' as a category is usually singular in this phrase, and 'art activities' is clearer than 'arts'. Also avoid filler words 'uh' and repetition. Use parallel nouns: 'sport and art activities' or 'sports and arts' consistently.