机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, word forms) and avoid redundant phrases. Aim for 2–4 sentences and include one specific example with a brief reason why it was memorable.

範例: Yes. As a child I often tried new activities with my family. For example, I learned to fish with my father at the beach and on a large river, which I remember vividly because we spent long, happy days together and I enjoyed learning patience and how to handle a fishing rod.

建議: Clarify your opinion in a direct topic sentence, then support it with clear reasons using linking words. Fix word choice and grammar (avoid phrases like “as a show,” “buy something more harder,” and “avail”). Keep sentences short and coherent, and give one concrete reason or example why trying new things is beneficial.

範例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover new skills and interests. For instance, learning a new hobby like painting or coding can reveal talents you never knew you had and improve your confidence, even if it takes time and effort.

× Yes when I was a young child I went to many beautiful places with my family especially I'm very impressed to fish with my father to beautiful beaches and big river It was very memorable things as I remember now.

✓ Yes. When I was a young child, I went to many beautiful places with my family. I was especially very impressed by fishing with my father at beautiful beaches and a big river. It was a very memorable experience, as I remember now.

This sentence contains multiple structure and agreement errors (Grammar problem type ID 26). Mistakes include run-on sentences, incorrect verb forms and prepositions, wrong noun forms, and missing articles. Corrections made: split into shorter sentences to fix run-on structure; changed 'I'm very impressed to fish' to 'I was especially very impressed by fishing' (correct verb form and preposition); changed 'to beautiful beaches and big river' to 'at beautiful beaches and a big river' (correct preposition and add article); changed 'It was very memorable things' to 'It was a very memorable experience' (singular noun and correct collocation). Suggestion: break complex ideas into separate sentences, use correct prepositions with activities (impressed by, fishing at), use articles before singular countable nouns, and match tense consistently (past simple) for past events.

× As a show, we always try to buy something more harder, even it takes a long time because we don't know our whole life what we can make, what we cannot avail. So every time we need to try to do something as we can.

✓ Personally, we should always try new things, even if it takes a long time, because in our lives we do not know what we can achieve and what we cannot. Therefore, we should try our best whenever we can.

This response has multiple sentence structure and word choice errors (Grammar problem type ID 26). Problems corrected: 'As a show' is unclear and changed to 'Personally' to match the intended viewpoint; 'try to buy something more harder' is ungrammatical and replaced with 'should always try new things' (correct collocation and comparatives removed); 'even it takes a long time' changed to 'even if it takes a long time' (correct conjunction and conditional); 'we don't know our whole life what we can make, what we cannot avail' rewritten as 'in our lives we do not know what we can achieve and what we cannot' (correct vocabulary and word order); final sentence simplified to 'we should try our best whenever we can' (natural phrasing). Suggestions: use clear connectors (if, even if, therefore), choose appropriate verbs (achieve instead of make/avail), avoid awkward literal translations, and keep sentences concise and coherent.