机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is largely unclear and contains grammatical errors and irrelevant phrases. Aim to respond directly with a clear topic sentence describing one or two activities you tried as a child, then add 1–2 supporting details (why you liked them, how often you did them). Keep answers natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use correct subject references and simple past tense for past activities. Include linking words (for example, because, although, and) to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. As a child I often went fishing with my father, which I enjoyed a lot because it gave us time together and I learned patience. I also tried basic makeup and costume play once for a school show, and that experience helped me become more confident on stage.

建議: Your answer expresses agreement but is vague and has sentence structure issues. Give a clear topic sentence (Yes, people should try many things), then provide 2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because and so). Use concrete examples and keep it concise. Avoid unclear phrases like "we drive to something"—instead say "we are exposed to" or "we learn new skills."

範例: Yes, I think people should try many different activities because it helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, trying sports or music can improve teamwork and discipline, and trying different jobs or hobbies can reveal a career path you enjoy.

× His name was a young child, I went to makeup especially as a little sea in order to enjoy fishing with my father.

✓ When I was a young child, I went to the seaside often to enjoy fishing with my father.

The original sentence uses wrong pronouns and phrases: 'His name was a young child' is incorrect and should be 'When I was a young child' (incorrect pronoun and tense/context). 'makeup' and 'a little sea' are wrong word choices; the correct noun is 'seaside'. The sentence also needed clearer adverb placement: 'often' or 'especially' can indicate frequency. Suggestion: use 'When I was a young child' to indicate time, 'seaside' for the place, and place frequency adverbs before the main verb or after the subject as appropriate.

× It was very my love but soon since he remained now.

✓ I loved it very much, but I don't anymore.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'It was very my love' incorrectly orders words and uses 'my' incorrectly; correct expression is 'I loved it very much' (subject + past verb + object/adverb). 'But soon since he remained now' is incoherent; likely intended meaning is that the feeling changed and they no longer love it, so use present negative 'I don't anymore' or 'I no longer do.' Keep tense consistent with context.

× Yes, I think so because people we drive to something in a lot of ways and we can get just a few opportunities to improve or develop in this situation.

✓ Yes, I think so because people are driven to new things in many ways, and we may have only a few opportunities to improve or develop in certain situations.

The original sentence has a subject-verb agreement/confused structure: 'people we drive to something' is incorrect; use passive or active construction like 'people are driven to new things' or 'we are driven to try new things.' 'in a lot of ways' is awkward; 'in many ways' is natural. 'we can get just a few opportunities' is better as 'we may have only a few opportunities' for clarity and modality. Also keep consistent plural forms and verb forms.