机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Bạn cần cải thiện về tính chính xác ngữ pháp, từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc trả lời rõ ràng. Cụ thể: 1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + brief reason). 2) Sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ "opportunities to take part in new activities", không phải "take up in new athletes"). 3) Dùng thì phù hợp khi nói về quá khứ (used to + verb). 4) Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ liên kết bằng từ nối (for example, because, so) để làm rõ ý. 5) Giữ câu trả lời trong tối đa 5 câu và tránh dư thừa.

範例: Yes, I had limited opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I usually stayed at home and played with my siblings, so I didn’t join many clubs or sports. Because of that, I only tried a few activities like drawing and biking occasionally. Now I wish I had explored more options when I was younger.

建議: Bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng và có logic; câu hiện tại không rõ nghĩa và chứa nhiều lỗi ngôn ngữ. Cụ thể: 1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + reason). 2) Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g. "diverse experiences", "learn", "discover"). 3) Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for instance, this helps..., therefore...). 4) Cung cấp một ví dụ hoặc kết quả cụ thể để hỗ trợ ý kiến. 5) Tránh câu lộn xộn, giữ tối đa 3–4 câu ngắn gọn.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try many different things because it helps them learn new skills and discover their interests. For instance, trying a new hobby like cooking or a sport can boost confidence and reveal hidden talents. Therefore, being open to experiences usually leads to personal growth and better choices in the future.

× Now I don't have many opportunities to take up in new athletes when I was a child a small time I used to pay at home.

✓ When I was a child I didn't have many opportunities to take part in new activities; most of the time I used to play at home.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect word order, wrong vocabulary ('athletes' instead of 'activities'), mixed tenses ('Now I don't have' with 'when I was a child'), and wrong verb choice ('pay' instead of 'play'). To correct this, separate the time clause 'When I was a child' and use past tense consistently ('didn't have', 'used to play'). Use the phrase 'take part in' for joining activities and the noun 'activities' rather than 'athletes'. Suggestions: place time expressions at the beginning or clearly within the sentence, keep verb tenses consistent for the same time frame, choose correct vocabulary (play vs pay, activities vs athletes).

× There's a pincer pupil so many native when they have a dress.

✓ There is a pressure on pupils and many feel nervous when they have to wear a uniform.

The original sentence contains unclear word choices ('pincer' instead of 'pressure', 'native' unclear) and poor sentence structure. Also the meaning seems to be about pupils feeling something related to 'dress' (likely school uniform). To fix it, use the correct noun 'pressure', clarify the subject 'pupils', and express the consequence with a clear clause 'many feel nervous when they have to wear a uniform'. Keep tense present simple for general statements. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary, form a clear subject and predicate, and use a subordinate clause to explain when the feeling occurs.