机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., 'introverted', 'I liked to stay at home'), avoid repetition, and keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences). Add one specific supporting detail (an activity you did alone) and use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

範例: I wasn’t very interested in group activities as a child because I was quite introverted and preferred being alone. For example, I often played with building blocks and read books by myself. Because I had no siblings, I enjoyed quiet, solitary hobbies rather than team games.

建議: Make your opinion clear and support it with one or two concise, specific reasons and an example. Improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however') to connect ideas. Finish your thought fully and avoid trailing off.

範例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover their real interests. For example, someone studying engineering might try photography as a hobby and realize they prefer a creative career. Therefore, experimenting with different activities can help people find the right path.

× You know, I was never interested in these kind of opportunities as a child because I was a very introvert child.

✓ You know, I was never interested in these kinds of opportunities as a child because I was a very introverted child.

Two issues: 'these kind of' should be 'these kinds of' (plural form after 'these') or 'this kind of' for singular; this falls under adjective/quantifier agreement but is categorized here as incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs. 'Introvert' as used is a noun; the adjective form is 'introverted'. Use 'introverted' to describe a child. Suggestion: use 'these kinds of opportunities' or 'this kind of opportunity' and use 'introverted' when describing personality.

× I just love to stay tight, isolated because I had no sister and I have so no sister so I prefer spending time with myself rather than spending time with other person.

✓ I just loved to stay quiet and isolated because I had no sister, so I preferred spending time by myself rather than with other people.

Multiple problems: tense consistency (past should be used when talking about childhood), word choice and collocation ('stay tight' is incorrect; likely 'stay quiet' or 'keep to myself'), redundant phrasing, and incorrect pronouns/plurals. Classified here as adverb placement but also involves tense and pronoun errors; per instructions only correct types listed — the main stylistic error is adverb/adjective placement and word choice. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (use past tense 'loved', 'preferred'), use 'quiet and isolated' or 'keep to myself', and use 'other people' instead of 'other person' and 'by myself' instead of 'with myself'.

× I have so no sister so I prefer spending time with myself rather than spending time with other person.

✓ I had no sister, so I preferred spending time by myself rather than with other people.

Pronoun and determiner errors: 'I have so no sister' is ungrammatical; use past 'I had no sister' for childhood. 'With myself' is awkward — use 'by myself'. 'Other person' should be plural 'other people'. Suggestion: use correct tense and natural pronouns/determiners: 'I had no sister' and 'with other people' or 'with anyone else'.

× I used to play alone.

✓ I used to play alone.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'Used to play alone' correctly expresses a habitual past action. No change necessary.

× Yes, obviously because everything has its own opportunity.

✓ Yes, obviously, because different things offer different opportunities.

'Everything has its own opportunity' is awkward and unidiomatic. This is a quantifier/word choice issue: 'everything' with 'its own opportunity' is unclear. Suggest rephrasing to 'different things offer different opportunities' to convey meaning clearly.

× Most of the people cannot accomplish their goal with one opportunity.

✓ Most people cannot accomplish their goals with just one opportunity.

'Most of the people' should be 'most people'; 'their goal' is better as plural 'their goals' to match generalization; add 'just' for emphasis. This is a quantifier/number agreement issue.

× So they should pursue every single thing that they could attain to get their goal because sometimes the thing you are following is not your real goal but something else could be your real goal and your

✓ So they should pursue every opportunity they can to reach their goals, because sometimes what you are pursuing is not your real goal and something else might be.

Original sentence has conjunction and structure problems: 'that they could attain to get their goal' is unidiomatic and wordy; 'and your' is incomplete. Classified as conjunction/structure error. Suggest concise construction: 'pursue every opportunity they can to reach their goals' and use 'might be' for possibility. Ensure sentence completion.