机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Используйте правильную грамматику и простые структуры предложений, чтобы ответ был естественным и понятным. Избегайте неточных выражений и лишних слов (например, "take participant" и "or etc."). Дайте чёткое основное предложение, затем одно-две конкретные детали с логической связкой. Также избегайте неуместных фраз (например, "at 1:00").

範例: Yes. As a child I had many chances to try new activities, such as dancing and painting. These experiences helped me develop skills and discover what I enjoyed, so I could focus on improving over time.

建議: Сформулируйте четкий ответ на вопрос и используйте связки для объяснения причины. Избегайте путанных фраз и ошибок в согласовании времен и порядках слов (например, "in case of I had"). Дайте одно обобщённое мнение, затем конкретную причину или пример, не более двух дополнительных предложений.

範例: Yes, I do. Trying many things helps people discover their strengths and learn new skills, so they can choose what suits them best. For example, someone who experiments with music and coding may find a unique way to combine both interests.

× Of course, as a child I have a lot of opportunities to take participant in new activities, as an instance dance, art or etc.

✓ Of course, as a child I had a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities, for instance dance or art.

The sentence uses present tense 'have' though it refers to childhood (past). Also 'take participant' is incorrect collocation; correct is 'take part'. 'As an instance' is awkward; use 'for instance'. Remove 'or etc.' which is redundant. Suggestion: use past tense for past experiences, use 'take part', and use 'for instance' followed by examples.

× I think that these opportunities could help me in the future 'cause starting from child I had a lot of time to become a professional at 1:00.

✓ I think that these opportunities could help me in the future because, starting from childhood, I had a lot of time to become a professional.

'Starting from child' is incorrect; use the noun 'childhood'. The contraction 'cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'At 1:00' is irrelevant and likely incorrect; remove it. Ensure nouns and time expressions are appropriate; use simple past 'had' for past period.

× Well, I will definitely agree with that statement in case of I had a vast diversity of experiences when new people for me tried new things and based on that they had their precious skills.

✓ Well, I definitely agree with that statement because I had a wide variety of experiences when I tried new things, and as a result I developed useful skills.

'I will definitely agree' suggests future but speaker expresses present opinion; use 'I definitely agree'. 'In case of I had' is ungrammatical; use 'because I had'. 'A vast diversity' is wordy; use 'a wide variety'. 'When new people for me tried new things' is unclear; change to 'when I tried new things'. 'They had their precious skills' is awkward; use 'I developed useful skills'. Use consistent past tense for past experiences and present for current opinion.