机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., name the activity clearly) and tense (use past tense for childhood). Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences.

範例: Yes. I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my mother enrolled me in dance and Taekwondo, which improved my discipline and confidence. As a result, those experiences helped shape my career choices later on.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide two clear, specific reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid vague phrasing. Keep the answer coherent and concise (max 5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I believe people should try different things because it helps them learn new skills and gain confidence. For instance, learning a new language can open job opportunities, and trying new hobbies can reduce stress. Therefore, experimenting with activities can lead to personal growth and broader perspectives.

× Yes, I have many opportunities as a child to take part in new activities such as my mother involved me in dance and trichwonda also and it helps me a lot in my career.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities as a child to take part in new activities; for example, my mother involved me in dance and Trichwonda, and it helped me a lot in my career.

The sentence describes past experiences from childhood, so past tense should be used rather than present perfect or present simple. Change 'have' to 'had' and 'helps' to 'helped' to maintain past tense. Also break the run-on sentence into clearer parts and capitalize the proper noun 'Trichwonda'. Suggestion: use past simple for events completed in the past and separate ideas with punctuation for clarity.

× Yes, people should try new things because new things helps us to learn new lessons and give a new beginning of our life.

✓ Yes, people should try new things because new things help us to learn new lessons and give us a new beginning in our lives.

The subject 'new things' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'help' not 'helps' (third person singular error). Also 'give a new beginning of our life' is awkward: use 'give us a new beginning in our lives' and include 'us' as the indirect object. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with plural subjects and include appropriate pronouns and natural prepositions ('in our lives').

× New things always better for us because it helps us to be different person or a new person, to see the life and with a new person

✓ New things are always better for us because they help us become different people, to see life in new ways, and to start again.

The sentence lacks the linking verb 'are' after the subject ('New things'), causing a sentence structure error. 'It helps' is incorrect because 'new things' is plural; use 'they help' for subject-verb agreement. 'Be different person' needs plural and article: 'become different people.' 'See the life and with a new person' is unclear; rephrase to 'see life in new ways, and to start again.' Suggestion: include the appropriate copula, match verbs to plural subjects, use plural forms where referring to people, and simplify awkward phrases for clarity.