机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and complete the sentence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one short reason and one brief example. Use linking words and correct grammar (e.g., past tense, complete clause). Avoid trailing off. For instance, say you didn’t try team sports because of lack of interest, then add a specific alternative activity you did or a reason such as family influence.

範例: No, I didn’t take part in team sports like volleyball or football when I was a child because I wasn’t interested in them. Instead, I focused on individual hobbies such as reading and drawing, which my parents encouraged. As a result, I developed my artistic skills rather than sporting ones.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and then add a specific reason and a brief example or consequence using linking words (e.g., because, for example, therefore). Avoid repeating phrases. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., ‘explore’, ‘discover’, ‘broaden one’s horizons’). Keep to under five sentences.

範例: Yes, people should try many different activities because exploring new things helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, by trying painting and coding, someone might realise they prefer creative work over technical tasks. Consequently, this exploration can guide future study or career choices.

× I think I didn't try any activities such as volleyball, football and baseball because I was not interested in participating in

✓ I think I didn't try any activities such as volleyball, football, and baseball because I wasn't interested in participating in them.

The sentence uses past tense appropriately but is incomplete and omits the object after 'participating in'. Add the pronoun 'them' to complete the prepositional phrase. Also contracting 'was not' to 'wasn't' is optional; the main correction is adding the missing object and a serial comma for clarity.

× I think trying as many different things as people can is very important in living life because if people try many things they can know what they want and what they like.

✓ I think trying as many different things as people can is very important in life because if people try many things they can find out what they want and what they like.

The original repeats 'in living life', which is wordy; 'in life' is more natural. Also 'know' is acceptable but 'find out' is a clearer verb phrase to express discovering preferences. The gerund phrase 'trying' is correctly used, so adjust wording for naturalness and clarity rather than fixing a grammatical error.