机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific supporting details (what activity, when, how the school helped, and a result). Use correct nouns and avoid repetition. Also correct grammar (e.g., "when I was a child," "badminton," "play at a national level"). Aim for 2–4 linked sentences with simple linking words (for example, "because," "so," "as a result").

範例: Yes. I had the chance to try new activities at school when I was a child. For example, I played badminton competitively because my school had a sports program and coaches who trained students after class. As a result, I was able to compete in regional tournaments and improve my skills.

建議: Give a clear opinion followed by two specific, linked reasons. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words (for example, "for example," "also," "because"). Be more precise about the benefits of trying new things (skills, perspective, enjoyment). Keep within 3–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "experience," "broaden horizons").

範例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because new experiences broaden our horizons and help us learn about ourselves. For example, traveling to other countries exposes you to different cultures and cuisines, which can change your perspective. Also, trying varied activities can help you discover new interests and develop useful skills.

× I did get the opportunities when I was child in my school I liked to play the bandminton at a so my school gave me the opportunity to to work in what would to play at a national level.

✓ I did get opportunities when I was a child at my school. I liked to play badminton, so my school gave me the opportunity to play at the national level.

The sentence has several singular/plural and article issues. 'the opportunities' should be 'opportunities' or 'the opportunity' depending on meaning; here plural 'opportunities' fits better. 'when I was child' needs the article 'a' before 'child'. 'the bandminton' should be 'badminton' without 'the'. 'at a so' is incorrect and removed; 'the opportunity to to work in what would to play' is ungrammatical and simplified to 'the opportunity to play at the national level.' Suggestion: separate into two sentences, use 'a child', remove unnecessary 'the', use correct noun form 'badminton', and use 'opportunity to play'.

× I did get the opportunities when I was child in my school I liked to play the bandminton at a so my school gave me the opportunity to to work in what would to play at a national level.

✓ I did get opportunities when I was a child at my school. I liked to play badminton, so my school gave me the opportunity to play at the national level.

Multiple definite article errors: 'the opportunities' is unnecessary; 'when I was child' needs 'a'; 'the bandminton' incorrectly uses 'the' and misspells 'badminton'. Use 'the opportunity' correctly for a specific chance, and 'play at the national level' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: use articles only where standard ('a child', 'the opportunity') and omit 'the' before sports.

× I did get the opportunities when I was child in my school I liked to play the bandminton at a so my school gave me the opportunity to to work in what would to play at a national level.

✓ I did get opportunities when I was a child at my school. I liked to play badminton, so my school gave me the opportunity to play at the national level.

The original is a run-on with unclear segments and extra words ('at a', 'to to work in what would to play'). Fix by dividing into two clear sentences and removing redundant or meaningless phrases. Suggestion: keep clauses concise and logical: subject + verb + object, and join with conjunctions correctly.

× Yes, definitely people should try different things in their life like they can they can travel to the different countries moreover if they can they can eat the different cuisines according to their taste.

✓ Yes, definitely. People should try different things in their lives. For example, they can travel to different countries and try different cuisines according to their taste.

Problems include repetition and wrong pluralization of 'life' (should be 'lives' when referring to people generally). Also awkward phrasing 'they can they can' repeats. The verbs 'travel' and 'eat' are fine but better as 'try' for cuisines. Suggestion: use 'lives' for plural subjects, avoid repetition, and use clear examples separated by commas or separate sentences.

× So definitely we should we should explore many, many things if they get if we get chance in our life.

✓ So definitely we should explore many things if we get the chance in our lives.

Pronoun inconsistency: the sentence switches between 'they' and 'we.' Maintain one perspective; here 'we' matches the speaker. Also 'chance' needs the article 'the' and 'life' should be plural 'lives' when referring generally. Remove repeated 'we should'. Suggestion: choose consistent subject pronoun and include 'the chance'.