机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and personal, but it has some hesitations and minor grammar issues. To improve: 1) Remove filler words like “uh” to sound more fluent. 2) Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (what you learned, how winning felt). 3) Use past tense consistently and correct articles (e.g., “a prize”). 4) Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “because,” “so,” “therefore”).

範例: Yes. As a child, I had the chance to learn poetry from my teacher. She encouraged me to enter a school poetry competition, and I won a prize, which made me very proud because it boosted my confidence and motivated me to write more.

建議: Good opinion but grammar, coherence and vocabulary need polishing. To improve: 1) Use a clear topic sentence stating your view. 2) Use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) to give logical reasons. 3) Correct grammar: use appropriate verb forms (e.g., “they can find” not “they were find”), and avoid fillers. 4) Provide one specific example of how trying things helps (career choice, personal growth). Keep answer to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, definitely. People should try different activities because it helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, trying sports or volunteering can reveal a passion or build teamwork skills, which is valuable for future study or work.

× So when there was a competition, she asked me to take part in the activity and I got a prize and I really felt so happy.

✓ So when there was a competition, she asked me to take part in the activity, I won a prize, and I felt very happy.

The sentence uses past events so verbs should be simple past. 'Got a prize' is informal; 'won a prize' is the appropriate past-tense verb collocation. Also combine clauses with commas for clarity and choose 'very happy' instead of 'so happy' for formal correctness.

× I believe people try many different activities or things, uh, they were find their interest or learn something of skills, uh, it's helpful and useful for their future or development.

✓ I believe people should try many different activities and things; they will find their interests or learn some skills, and it will be helpful for their future development.

Multiple issues: use of present tense and modal meaning—'should try' expresses recommendation better than simple present. 'They were find' is incorrect verb form and tense—use 'they will find' or 'they can find'. 'Learn something of skills' is ungrammatical; use 'learn some skills'. 'It's helpful and useful for their future or development' is awkward/redundant; use 'it will be helpful for their future development'. Corrections follow appropriate tense and word choice for general statements and advice.