机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant, but it has several issues: some sentences are incomplete or unclear (e.g., “I believe it's really important to.” and the unrelated phrase “A bad smell of coffee”), and there is some repetition and lack of specific detail. To improve: 1) Give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. 2) Add one or two specific supporting details (which activities, when, what you learned). 3) Use linking words (e.g., because, however, therefore) to make the response coherent. 4) Keep responses concise (no more than five sentences) and avoid unrelated phrases. Work on pronunciation and fluency so sentences flow naturally.

範例: Yes. When I was a child I had the chance to try several new activities at school, such as football and hiking. However, I wasn’t very interested then, so I didn’t practice much. Looking back, I wish I had taken them more seriously because they would have helped me discover my strengths in teamwork and endurance.

建議: Your answer expresses a clear opinion but contains grammatical errors, incomplete sentences (e.g., “when they. Out new things and become succeed”), and some awkward wording (“get explore”). To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion. 2) Give one specific reason and an example to support it. 3) Use correct verb forms and linking words (for example: because, for example, therefore). 4) Keep sentences complete and concise, avoiding repetition. Practice forming full sentences and connecting ideas smoothly to improve coherence and accuracy.

範例: Yes, absolutely. People should try many different activities because doing so helps them discover hidden talents and build new skills. For example, trying a music class or a coding club might reveal a talent you never expected, and that could lead to future study or career choices.

× When I was a kid, I had several opportunities to try out different new things, especially sports and other outdoor activities in my school.

✓ When I was a kid, I had several opportunities to try different new things, especially sports and other outdoor activities at my school.

Use of past tense 'had' is correct, but 'try out' can be simplified to 'try'; 'in my school' is incorrect preposition use—use 'at my school' to indicate location. Also 'different new things' is redundant; 'new things' or 'different things' is preferable.

× However, I was not much interested during those days.

✓ However, I was not very interested in those days.

The phrase 'not much interested' is informal and awkward; use 'not very interested'. Also 'during those days' is better expressed as 'in those days' when referring to a general period in the past.

× But now I feel like I missed that opportunity.

✓ But now I feel like I missed those opportunities.

Mismatch between singular 'that opportunity' and earlier plural 'several opportunities' creates inconsistency. Use plural to match. The tense 'missed' is correct to express regret about the past.

× I believe it's really important to.

✓ I believe it's really important to try new things.

Original sentence is incomplete and lacks the verb phrase (sentence without a verb). Complete the thought by adding 'try new things' to convey the intended meaning.

× A bad smell of coffee, so we get an opportunity to learn new things and identify our potentials.

✓ We should take opportunities to learn new things and identify our potentials.

The original sentence is fragmented and begins with an irrelevant phrase 'A bad smell of coffee.' This appears to be an error or stray words. The corrected sentence forms a complete idea and removes unrelated fragment. Use 'identify our potentials' is acceptable though 'identify our potential' or 'discover our strengths' is more natural.

× I think it's really important to try out new things and get explore different opportunities because it helps them to identify their hidden talents and potentials.

✓ I think it's really important to try new things and explore different opportunities because they help people identify their hidden talents and potential.

The phrase 'get explore' is ungrammatical—use either 'get to explore' or simply 'explore'; here 'explore' is cleaner. 'Helps them' mismatches with the subject; use 'they help people' or 'it helps them' consistently. 'Potentials' is nonstandard; use 'potential' or 'strengths'.

× I would say it opens new doors for people when they.

✓ I would say it opens new doors for people when they try new things and succeed.

The sentence is incomplete ('when they.'), missing the clause that explains what 'they' do. Complete the sentence by adding the verbs 'try new things and succeed' to express consequence.

× Out new things and become succeed.

✓ try new things and succeed.

This fragment contains multiple errors: 'Out' is leftover from 'try out' and placed incorrectly; 'become succeed' is ungrammatical—use 'succeed' without 'become'. The corrected phrase uses the verb 'try' and the intransitive verb 'succeed' properly.