机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 用词和语法需要改正，回答应更自然并包含主题句和具体细节。比如时态一致（过去时）、纠正拼写/搭配错误（“find motors skills”应为“fine motor skills”），补充1–2个支持细节并用连接词衔接。例如提到学习过程、项目示例或长期影响；同时避免不必要的礼貌语“Thank you”。

範例: Yes. When I was in primary school I had the chance to learn paper cutting, which involved making intricate shapes and patterns. At first I practiced simple designs, but over time I made more complex pieces for school displays, which improved my concentration and my fine motor skills. As a result, I became more patient and enjoyed detailed craftwork.

建議: 答案观点明确但表达重复且句子结构松散。应先给出明确主题句，然后用一到两个连贯的支持句解释原因并举例，使用连接词（for example, because, moreover）使逻辑更清晰。去掉多余的客套用语，注意简洁性（不超过5句）。

範例: Yes, I believe people should try many different things because it helps them discover their strengths and interests. For example, trying sports, music or volunteering can reveal hidden talents and expand your perspective. Moreover, diverse experiences make you more adaptable and confident when facing new challenges.

× This hobby really improves my concentration and find motors skills.

✓ This hobby really improves my concentration and fine motor skills.

句子中用到的“find motors skills”是拼写错误且词序不当。正确短语是“fine motor skills”，表示精细运动技能。另外，需要使用形容词“fine”修饰名词“motor skills”。建议记住常见固定搭配，并注意拼写检查。

× Well, absolutely when I was in primary school I got a precious opportunity to try paper cutting which involves making intricate shapes and patterns.

✓ Well, absolutely. When I was in primary school I had a precious opportunity to try paper cutting, which involved making intricate shapes and patterns.

句子混合了过去时和现在时：说话者讲述过去的经历，应全句使用过去时。原句中“involves”使用了现在时，需改为过去式“involved”。同时把“got”改为“had”更自然。建议描述过去经历时统一使用过去时态，注意从句时态一致。

× Well, in my opinion, I think so, because more things, different things can help us to know what we are good at and what we are interested in and we can broaden our horizons.

✓ Well, in my opinion, yes. Trying more and different things can help us find out what we are good at and what we are interested in, and we can broaden our horizons.

原句结构冗长且重复（“in my opinion, I think”重复表达意见），并且短语顺序不够自然。将“more things, different things”合并为“more and different things”，并用更自然的动词短语“help us find out”替换“help us to know”。建议避免冗余表达，简化句子并使用常见搭配以提高流畅度。

× Well, absolutely when I was in primary school I got a precious opportunity to try paper cutting which involves making intricate shapes and patterns.

✓ Well, absolutely. When I was in primary school I had a precious opportunity to try paper cutting, which involved making intricate shapes and patterns.

在该句中应在“paper cutting”前不需要冠词（作为不可数或活动名词使用），但原句语序和标点需调整以更清晰。已在更正句中通过标点和时态一致性修正。建议注意活动名词通常不加冠词，并用逗号分隔定语从句以增强可读性。

× This hobby really improves my concentration and find motors skills.

✓ This hobby really improves my concentration and fine motor skills.

原句中“improves”与并列的宾语“my concentration and find motors skills”搭配时因为第二部分是错误拼写导致不清楚，但主谓一致应保持动词单数形式“improves”对应单一主语“this hobby”。纠正后句子主谓一致且宾语正确。建议检查拼写并确认并列宾语结构的正确表达。