机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Expand to 2–3 concise sentences, add a specific example of an activity, and include a brief reason why it mattered to you. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and vary sentence structures and vocabulary (extra-curricular, opportunities, enthusiastic, diverse).

範例: Yes, I had many opportunities to participate in new activities because I attended an international school with diverse extra-curricular programs. For example, I joined the drama club and enjoyed performing, which helped me become more confident speaking in public.

建議: Make a clearer topic sentence stating your overall opinion, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons or an example. Improve grammar and sentence coherence by using linking words (however, on the other hand, for example). Keep answers within 2–3 sentences and avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., "do best in them supposed to be an epitome"). Use precise vocabulary like "focus on one skill" or "explore different activities."

範例: I think it depends on the individual: some people benefit from focusing on one skill to reach excellence, while others learn more by exploring different activities. For example, a musician may need to concentrate on practice to improve, whereas a student exploring clubs can discover new interests and skills.

× Good job!

✓ Good job!

This short expression is not ungrammatical but is contextually odd as an answer to the examiner's question; no grammatical correction needed. Keep as is if used as feedback rather than the student's spoken reply.

× Your answer clearly addresses the question and is easy to understand.

✓ Your answer clearly addresses the question and is easy to understand.

This is grammatically correct; no change required. It is a complete sentence with correct subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.

× You give a reason (you attended a good international school) and a personal reaction (you were eager), which is exactly the kind of content the examiner looks for.

✓ You gave a reason (you attended a good international school) and a personal reaction (you were eager), which is exactly the kind of content the examiner looks for.

The sentence mixes past events (attended, were eager) with present simple 'give'. Use past tense 'gave' to match the past actions described. Suggestion: keep tense consistent by using past tense when referring to what the student said previously.

× The response is short and relevant, though you could expand slightly to reach the recommended 2–3 sentence length with more detail or an example.

✓ The response is short and relevant, though you could expand it slightly to reach the recommended 2–3 sentence length with more detail or an example.

Add the object 'it' after 'expand' for clarity and grammatical completeness. This corrects a minor sentence structure omission.

× Grammar is mostly correct, but sentence variety and vocabulary could be improved to score higher in fluency and lexical resource.

✓ Grammar is mostly correct, but sentence variety and vocabulary could be improved to score higher in fluency and lexical resource.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change required.

× Add a brief example of an activity to make the answer more concrete (e.g., sports, drama, science clubs).

✓ Add a brief example of an activity to make the answer more concrete (e.g., sports, drama, or science clubs).

Insert 'or' to make the list sound natural in this context. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical fix.

× Vary sentence structures and use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., “opportunities to participate,” “extra-curricular,” “enthusiastic,” “diverse”).

✓ Vary sentence structures and use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'opportunities to participate', 'extra-curricular', 'enthusiastic', 'diverse').

No grammatical error; replaced double quotes with single quotes to match required output formatting. Advice stands: use varied vocabulary and structures.

× Make one sentence that explains why these activities mattered to you (what you gained).

✓ Make one sentence that explains why these activities mattered to you (what you gained).

This is grammatically correct; no change required.

× Yes. I had many opportunities to join new activities because I went to an international school that offered diverse extra-curricular programs.

✓ Yes. I had many opportunities to join new activities because I attended an international school that offered diverse extra-curricular programs.

Using 'attended' is slightly more natural than 'went to' when referring to school in a formal speaking response; both are past tense. This change improves register and clarity.

× This should depend on the person who is trying to.

✓ This should depend on the person who is trying.

The original ends with an unnecessary preposition 'to' without an object. Removing 'to' completes the clause correctly. Alternatively, rephrase as 'This depends on the person who is trying.' Suggestion: use simpler phrasing for clarity.

× Many people like to stick to one particular thing and do best in them supposed to be an epitome of the skill they have learnt, whereas others might like to try hands on different activities.

✓ Many people like to stick to one particular thing and do best at it, becoming an example of the skill they have learned, whereas others might like to try their hand at different activities.

Multiple issues fixed: 'do best in them' is incorrect pronoun reference and preposition—use 'do best at it' for singular 'one particular thing'. 'Supposed to be an epitome' is awkward; 'becoming an example' is clearer. 'Learnt' changed to 'learned' for standard American English spelling (either is acceptable). 'Try hands on' is ungrammatical; correct idiom is 'try their hand at'. Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree in number with antecedents and use common idiomatic expressions.

× So, this would vary from person to person.

✓ So, this varies from person to person.

Use simple present 'varies' to state a general truth instead of conditional 'would vary' which implies hypothetical. Present simple is more appropriate when giving general opinions. Suggestion: use present tense for generalizations.