机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更自然、句子间用连词衔接并注意语法与发音。可以把回答拆成主题句+具体例子，避免单句过长且重复。例如把“I did I had”改为“I did. I had”或用从句连接；列举活动时用and连接并加一些细节。

範例: Yes, I did. I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities when I was a child, such as dancing, singing and drawing. For example, I took dance classes every weekend and joined a school choir for two years, which helped me build confidence and make friends.

建議: 回答要更有条理并纠正词汇错误（“drowning”应为“driving”或其它意图活动）。避免重复词（“trying trying”）。给出具体理由并用连接词组织，如“because”或“for example”。

範例: Yes, of course. I believe people should try many different activities because it helps them discover new interests and skills. For example, I enjoy playing basketball and learning to drive; these experiences improved my fitness and independence.

× Yes, I did I had many opportunities to take part in new activities when I was a child like dancing, singing and drawing

✓ Yes, I did. I had many opportunities to take part in new activities when I was a child, such as dancing, singing and drawing.

问题类型：句子结构错误（26）。原句缺少标点和连接，导致两个独立句连在一起，难以理解；并且“like”在此处可用更正式的“such as”。建议在“Yes, I did.”之后加句号分开两句话，并在列举前使用逗号和“such as”来引出例子。中文说明：原句把两个完整句子连在一起，缺少标点使结构混乱；在列举时用“such as”更自然。修改时在“Yes, I did.”后加句号，并在列举前加逗号和替换为“such as”。

× Yes, of course I think people should try as many different things as they can. For example, I like trying trying many different things such as playing basketball and drowning.

✓ Yes, of course. I think people should try as many different things as they can. For example, I like trying many different things, such as playing basketball and drawing.

问题类型：动词重复/用词错误，归类为动词+ -ing形式（8）以及词汇错误。原句有“trying trying”的重复，并且将“drawing”（画画）误写为“drowning”（溺水）。建议删除重复的“trying”，并把“drowning”改为正确的“drawing”；在“for example”后加句号或逗号以改善句子流畅性，列举前加逗号并使用“such as”。中文说明：原句中“trying”重复出现是笔误，应删去重复项；“drowning”是拼写错误，意思为“溺水”，应改为“drawing”（画画）。同时适当加入标点使句子更通顺。