机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, and complete your thoughts. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers under five sentences and use correct verb forms and articles.

範例: Yes. My parents always encouraged me to try new activities, so I learned the piano and basic guitar. For example, I took weekly piano lessons for three years, which helped me develop discipline and confidence. Overall, their support allowed me to explore different interests.

建議: Improve coherence and grammar, avoid repetition, and use linking words to contrast ideas. Begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with examples. Use correct sentence structure and lower-case within sentences.

範例: Yes, people should try many different things because it broadens their skills and perspectives. However, financial constraints can limit opportunities; for instance, international travel is expensive. Therefore, people can explore low-cost options like local classes or hiking nearby to gain new experiences.

× I learn a lot of things like learning music instrument like piano or guitar, even

✓ I learned a lot of things, such as learning musical instruments like the piano or guitar.

The student is referring to childhood experiences, so past tense is required (present participle issue relates to verb form). Also 'music instrument' is incorrect; use 'musical instruments' (plural) and include the definite article 'the' before specific instruments. Use 'such as' instead of 'like' for examples and finish the sentence. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for past experiences and correct noun forms: 'I learned a lot of things, such as learning musical instruments like the piano or guitar.'

× I think people should try as many different things as they can, but it's also So People have to rely on their financial background because every new thing costs a lot to like if you want to go travel around the world or if you want to go try to hiking

✓ I think people should try as many different things as they can, but they also have to consider their financial background because every new activity can be expensive, for example if you want to travel around the world or try hiking.

This sentence contains multiple structure problems: inappropriate capitalization ('So People'), awkward clause sequencing, incorrect verb forms ('have to rely on their financial background' is unnatural), and verb + -ing errors ('try to hiking'). Also 'costs a lot to like' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: simplify and reorganize: use 'they' instead of 'people' repeated, 'consider their financial background', and correct verb forms: 'travel' (not 'go travel') and 'try hiking' (verb + -ing). Use examples introduced by 'for example'.