机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cần rút gọn cho tự nhiên hơn, sửa ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Tránh mở đầu quá dài như “Back to the days when I was five years old” — chỉ cần nói “When I was five”. (2) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp: “There wasn't many activities” => “There weren't many activities.” (3) Giữ câu ngắn (không quá 5 câu) và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại hoạt động thiếu) để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. (4) Dùng từ liên kết nhẹ như “because” để giải thích nguyên nhân một cách mạch lạc.

範例: When I was five, I didn’t have many chances to try new activities because we lived in a suburb far from the city center. For example, there were no music schools or sports clubs nearby, so I mostly played at home with my siblings.

建議: Câu trả lời nêu quan điểm rõ ràng nhưng cần cải thiện cấu trúc và ngắt câu để tự nhiên hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Tránh lặp từ như “different new” — chỉ cần “different” hoặc “new”. (2) Chia ý thành hai câu để dễ hiểu: nêu quan điểm, sau đó giải thích lý do. (3) Thêm linking word như “however” để thể hiện điều kiện (tùy tính cách), và dùng ví dụ hoặc kết quả cụ thể để làm câu trả lời thêm thuyết phục. (4) Giữ tổng số câu không quá 5 và dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “broaden our horizons”, “develop new skills”.

範例: I think people should try as many different things as possible, although it depends on their personality. Trying new activities can broaden our horizons and help us develop useful skills; for instance, learning a new sport can improve fitness and teamwork.

× There wasn't many activities there.

✓ There weren't many activities there.

The subject 'activities' is plural, so the correct form of 'there be' in the past tense is 'there were' (negative: 'were not' -> 'weren't'). Using 'wasn't' with a plural noun is incorrect. Suggestion: match 'there' + plural noun with 'were' (e.g., 'There weren't many activities there.').

× Back to the days when I was five years old, I remember that I didn't have many chances to take part in any new activities since my family lived in a suburb, which was quite far away from the city centers.

✓ When I was five years old, I remember that I didn't have many chances to take part in new activities because my family lived in a suburb that was quite far from the city center.

The original sentence has awkward phrase order ('Back to the days when...') and redundant or incorrect expressions ('in any new activities', 'since' for reason is acceptable but 'because' is clearer here, 'city centers' vs 'city center'). Also use 'suburb that was quite far from the city center' for clarity and correct singular/plural. Suggestion: start with 'When I was five years old' and simplify clauses to make the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Although it still depends on people's personality, I do believe that we should try different new activities as many as we can because we only live once trying different activities may provide us new experiences and enhance our skills.

✓ Although it depends on people's personalities, I believe we should try as many new activities as we can because we only live once; trying different activities may provide us with new experiences and enhance our skills.

Problems: 'people's personality' should be plural 'people's personalities'; 'I do believe' is acceptable but 'I believe' is more natural; word order 'try different new activities as many as we can' is incorrect — correct is 'try as many new activities as we can'; run-on sentence lacking punctuation between clauses '...we only live once trying different...' should be separated with a semicolon or period; include preposition 'with' after 'provide us'. Suggestion: fix noun plurality, reorder comparative phrase, separate ideas with proper punctuation, and add 'with' for correct verb-preposition pairing.