疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответьте прямо и используйте естественное выражение «after university» или «after work», а не «after the university or job». Можно добавить краткую причину, чтобы ответ звучал полнее.

範例: Yes, I often feel tired in the evenings, especially after a busy day at university or work.

建議: Не начинайте с «As I said»: это повторяет предыдущий ответ. Используйте правильное выражение времени «around seven p.m.» и слово «stuff» вместо «staff». Перечислите занятия в естественной форме и согласуйте время глагола: здесь лучше «have had».

範例: I usually feel tired around seven in the evening because I’ve had classes, work, and sometimes social activities throughout the day.

建議: Ответ по теме, но выражение «gain my energy» звучит неестественно; лучше сказать «recharge» или «get my energy back». Избегайте повторов «maybe» и «or», а также используйте артикль в выражении «watching a film».

範例: When I feel tired, I try to recharge by doing something relaxing. I might watch a film, work on a hobby, or take a short nap.

建議: Начните с ясного ответа «No, I usually don’t». Вместо неестественного «I’m so kind of introverted person» скажите «I’m quite introverted». Уберите повтор «only» и объясните, что отдыхаете дома в одиночестве.

範例: No, I usually stay home when I’m tired. I’m quite introverted, so I recharge best when I have some time to myself.

× I feel tired mostly in the evenings after the university or job

✓ I feel tired mostly in the evenings after university or a job.

The definite article the is not normally used before university when referring generally to the experience of studying there. Use university without an article in this context.

× I feel tired mostly in the evenings after the university or job

✓ I feel tired mostly in the evenings after university or a job.

The singular countable noun job needs an article. Use a job when referring to any job, rather than a specific one.

× As I said, I feel tired in the evenings about seven PM because I had a lot of university staff, work staff and the lot of social activities.

✓ As I said, I feel tired in the evenings at about seven PM because I had a lot of university staff, work staff and the lot of social activities.

Use at with a specific time, including an approximate time such as about seven PM. A helpful pattern is at + time.

× As I said, I feel tired in the evenings about seven PM because I had a lot of university staff, work staff and the lot of social activities.

✓ As I said, I feel tired in the evenings about seven PM because I have a lot of university staff, work staff and the lot of social activities.

The student describes a regular, current reason for feeling tired, so the present tense have is more consistent with I feel. Use the present simple for habits and ongoing circumstances.

× As I said, I feel tired in the evenings about seven PM because I had a lot of university staff, work staff and the lot of social activities.

✓ As I said, I feel tired in the evenings about seven PM because I had a lot of university staff, work staff and a lot of social activities.

The correct quantity expression is a lot of, not the lot of, when referring generally to a large number or amount. Use a lot of before both plural countable nouns and uncountable nouns.

× When I feel tired, I try to gain my energy by doing something that I like, maybe it's a hobby or watching film or even just taking a nap or maybe sleeping

✓ When I feel tired, I try to gain my energy by doing something that I like, maybe it's a hobby or watching a film or even just taking a nap or maybe sleeping.

Film is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a film when referring to one unspecified film.

× No, when I feel tired I don't go out with my friends because I'm so kind of introverted person and I can recharge my energy only at home, only when only by myself

✓ No, when I feel tired I don't go out with my friends because I'm kind of an introverted person and I can recharge my energy only at home, only when only by myself.

So does not fit before kind of in this phrase. Use kind of to mean somewhat, or use so before an adjective directly, as in so introverted.

× No, when I feel tired I don't go out with my friends because I'm so kind of introverted person and I can recharge my energy only at home, only when only by myself

✓ No, when I feel tired I don't go out with my friends because I'm kind of an introverted person and I can recharge my energy only at home, only when only by myself.

Introverted person is a singular countable noun phrase and needs an article. Use an before introverted because the word begins with a vowel sound.