疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use a clear contrast to explain that being tired from work feels more satisfying than being tired because you cannot find work. Also, use natural word order, such as “I often feel tired,” and limit your answer to two or three connected sentences.

範例: Yes, I often feel tired because of my job. However, I prefer feeling tired after a busy day at work because it makes me feel productive. I would rather be tired from working than from looking for a job.

建議: Give a specific situation and complete your sentence. Begin with a direct answer, such as “I usually feel tired after…” Then add a reason or physical feeling, using a linking word like “because” or “especially when.” Avoid unfinished phrases and unclear expressions such as “over time that it feels hard.”

範例: I usually feel tired after working for several hours without a break. It is especially difficult when I have a heavy workload and nobody to talk to about my problems. In those situations, I find it hard to concentrate.

建議: Your answer gives a relevant activity and a clear result, but several phrases are unnatural. Say “I try to take my mind off it” instead of “I don't often see my attention,” and use “playing sports” or “doing physical activities.” Organize the response with a topic sentence, an example, and a result, and use “my tiredness disappears” rather than “all those tiredness will go away.”

範例: When I feel tired, I try to take my mind off work by doing some exercise. For example, I love playing volleyball with my friends because it helps me relax and forget my stress. Afterward, I usually feel refreshed and more energetic.

建議: Start with a clear answer, such as “Yes, sometimes I do.” Avoid contradicting yourself with “I don't I do.” Explain that socializing helps you relax, and use natural expressions such as “recharge my energy” or “feel refreshed.” Finish with a specific example and avoid the incomplete ending.

範例: Yes, sometimes I still go out with my friends when I feel tired. Spending time with them helps me relax and recharge, especially after a stressful day at work. We might have dinner together or take a short walk, and I usually feel better afterward.

× Yes, I feel often tired because of work but I do love the feeling of being tired because of work than to then to feel tired because of finding work.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because of work, but I love the feeling of being tired because of work more than feeling tired because of looking for work.

The adverb often usually comes before the main verb feel, not after it. Placing it before the verb makes the sentence sound more natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I feel often tired because of work but I do love the feeling of being tired because of work than to then to feel tired because of finding work.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because of work, but I love the feeling of being tired because of work more than feeling tired because of looking for work.

The original comparison uses an incorrect structure: than to then to. When comparing two activities after love something more, use more than followed by parallel forms, such as feeling ... more than feeling ....

× Over time that it feels hard feel so heavy and no one could I talk about it and

✓ When I feel tired for a long time, it becomes difficult to cope with the heavy feeling, and I have no one to talk to.

The original sentence is incomplete and the words are not arranged into a clear clause. A complete sentence needs a subject, a correctly formed verb phrase, and a clear ending.

× I don't often see my attention to other things like for example doing sports activity, I love playing volleyball it feels and it makes me feel so relieved and all those tiredness will go away.

✓ I often turn my attention to other things, such as doing sports activities. I love playing volleyball because it makes me feel relieved, and all that tiredness goes away.

The verb see cannot be used with attention in this meaning. Use turn my attention to or shift my attention to when describing a change in focus.

× I don't often see my attention to other things like for example doing sports activity, I love playing volleyball it feels and it makes me feel so relieved and all those tiredness will go away.

✓ I often turn my attention to other things, such as doing sports activities. I love playing volleyball because it makes me feel relieved, and all that tiredness goes away.

Sports activities refers to activities in general, so the plural form activities is appropriate. Also, tiredness is an uncountable noun, so it should be used with that rather than those.

× I don't often see my attention to other things like for example doing sports activity, I love playing volleyball it feels and it makes me feel so relieved and all those tiredness will go away.

✓ I often turn my attention to other things, such as doing sports activities. I love playing volleyball because it makes me feel relieved, and all that tiredness goes away.

The question asks about what the student usually does, so the present simple is appropriate. Use goes away instead of will go away for a habitual result.

× I don't often see my attention to other things like for example doing sports activity, I love playing volleyball it feels and it makes me feel so relieved and all those tiredness will go away.

✓ I often turn my attention to other things, such as doing sports activities. I love playing volleyball because it makes me feel relieved, and all that tiredness goes away.

The original contains several clauses joined together without proper punctuation or connecting words. Separating the ideas into two sentences and adding because creates a clear sentence structure.

× I don't I do go out with friends sometimes because I do believe that sometimes go out with your friend is all you need to rest your energy and to in a little time you need to do those

✓ Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends because I believe that going out with friends is all you need to restore your energy. After a short time, you feel rested.

The original sentence contains repeated words, an incomplete phrase, and several clauses that are not connected correctly. The revised version uses complete sentences and expresses each idea clearly.

× I don't I do go out with friends sometimes because I do believe that sometimes go out with your friend is all you need to rest your energy and to in a little time you need to do those

✓ Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends because I believe that going out with friends is all you need to restore your energy. After a short time, you feel rested.

When an activity is the subject of a sentence, use the gerund form going out. The phrase going out with friends functions as a noun and correctly describes the activity.

× I don't I do go out with friends sometimes because I do believe that sometimes go out with your friend is all you need to rest your energy and to in a little time you need to do those

✓ Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends because I believe that going out with friends is all you need to restore your energy. After a short time, you feel rested.

The answer refers to friends in general, so the plural form friends is more appropriate than the singular phrase your friend. Keeping the noun plural also makes it consistent with the question about going out with friends.