疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời có ý chính nhưng diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi dùng từ, chẳng hạn “after starving”, “in the hot day” và “mainly smoke”. Em nên trả lời trực tiếp rằng mình thường mệt trong những hoàn cảnh cụ thể, sau đó nêu một hoặc hai nguyên nhân rõ ràng. Tránh lặp từ “as you know” và sửa cấu trúc thành “on hot days” hoặc “when I go outside”.

範例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after skipping a meal or spending time outside on a hot day. I also feel exhausted when I am exposed to air pollution for too long.

建議: Câu trả lời chưa trả lời rõ câu hỏi vì “when I have a call” và “I have a bed mark” không phù hợp hoặc không rõ nghĩa trong ngữ cảnh này. Em nên dùng các cụm chính xác như “when I have a lot of homework”, “when I stay up late” hoặc “when I do not get enough sleep”. Hãy liên kết nguyên nhân và kết quả bằng “because” hoặc “so” để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I usually feel tired when I have a lot of homework to finish. If I stay up late to complete it, I do not get enough sleep, so I feel exhausted the next day.

建議: Câu trả lời có cấu trúc cơ bản và đưa ra các hoạt động cụ thể, nhưng một số từ/cụm từ chưa chính xác như “work for a few minutes”, “test a soft red” và “these are the best way”. Có thể em muốn nói “take a short rest” hoặc “take a short nap”. Em cũng cần sửa sự hòa hợp chủ ngữ–động từ: “these are the best ways”, đồng thời dùng từ nối để trình bày các bước tự nhiên hơn.

範例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short break and listen to some relaxing music. Sometimes I also take a quick nap because it helps me clear my mind and regain my energy.

建議: Câu trả lời thể hiện rõ lựa chọn và lý do, nhưng câu cuối có nhiều lỗi về từ vựng và cấu trúc. “Have a personal space” nên đổi thành “have some personal space”, còn “focus on anything around me like trees, streets in house” nên diễn đạt cụ thể hơn, chẳng hạn “enjoy the trees and quiet streets”. Em cũng nên trả lời trực tiếp “No” ở đầu câu để thể hiện rõ em không đi chơi với bạn khi mệt.

範例: No, I usually prefer to go out alone when I feel tired. I like having some personal space and taking a quiet walk while enjoying the trees and the peaceful streets. This helps me relax without having to talk to anyone.

× I often feel tired after starving and in the hot day as you As you know, when I go out, mainly smoke and I feel tired.

✓ I often feel tired after starving and on hot days. As you know, when I go out, I mainly smoke, and I feel tired.

The preposition on is used with days, so we say on hot days, not in the hot day. The expression in the hot day is also changed to the natural plural form on hot days because the student is speaking about hot days in general.

× I often feel tired after starving and in the hot day as you As you know, when I go out, mainly smoke and I feel tired.

✓ I often feel tired after starving and on hot days. As you know, when I go out, I mainly smoke, and I feel tired.

The phrase mainly smoke is missing its subject. The subject I must be placed before the verb: I mainly smoke. The repeated phrase as you is also removed to make the sentence clear and grammatically complete.

× I think these are the best way for me to relax my mind.

✓ I think these are the best ways for me to relax my mind.

The subject these is plural, so the plural noun ways is required. Do not use the singular noun way after the plural demonstrative these.

× When I feel tired I often go out alone because I want to have a personal space that I can focus on anything around me like trees, streets in house.

✓ When I feel tired, I often go out alone because I want some personal space where I can focus on things around me, like trees and streets, rather than staying in the house.

Personal space is normally an uncountable noun when it means time or room to be alone, so some personal space is more natural than a personal space. The phrase the house needs the definite article because it refers to a specific place.

× When I feel tired I often go out alone because I want to have a personal space that I can focus on anything around me like trees, streets in house.

✓ When I feel tired, I often go out alone because I want some personal space where I can focus on things around me, like trees and streets, rather than staying in the house.

That is not the appropriate relative word for describing a place or space in this sentence. Use where to mean in which. Also, things is more suitable than anything because the student is referring to specific objects such as trees and streets.