疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly with a more natural frequency phrase, such as “Quite often.” Avoid repeating “staircase” and “feel very tired,” and do not end with “so yes” after already giving your answer. Use one clear reason and a specific result to make the response more effective.

範例: Yes, quite often, especially when I climb the stairs at home. My house has several floors, and I sometimes feel out of breath by the time I reach the top. However, I usually recover after sitting down for a few minutes.

建議: The answer includes several relevant situations, but the ideas are connected in a long and repetitive sentence. Organize them with linking words such as “also” and “especially,” and avoid awkward phrases like “a lot of most of my time.” Give two or three clear examples rather than listing too many situations without pauses.

範例: I usually feel tired after climbing the stairs or going for a morning run. I also feel exhausted after a busy day at work, especially if I have been standing for several hours. In those situations, I normally need to rest before doing anything else.

建議: The response gives appropriate actions and a useful result, but some expressions are unnatural: say “take a break” instead of “catch a break,” “calm my nerves” instead of “relax my nerves calm down,” and “feel short of breath” instead of “have a shortness of breath.” Avoid repeating “calm down” and “catch my breath.”

範例: When I feel tired, I usually sit down and take a short break. If I feel short of breath, I drink some water and take a few slow breaths. This helps me relax and regain my energy before I continue with my activities.

建議: You answer directly and explain how you manage your tiredness, but the response contains repetition and an unclear final sentence. Replace “do still want to” with “usually do,” avoid repeating “just,” and explain the result more naturally. Use a contrast such as “Although I may feel tired, I can usually go out after resting for ten or twenty minutes.”

範例: Yes, I usually still go out with my friends, although I may need to rest first. After taking a short break for ten or twenty minutes, I normally feel refreshed enough to leave the house. Spending time with my friends also helps me relax and forget that I was tired.

× Yes, a lot of times I feel very tired usually when I go up the stairs because my house has a staircase and every time I use a staircase I feel very tired right after so yes.

✓ Yes, I often feel very tired when I go up the stairs because my house has a staircase. Every time I use the staircase, I feel very tired afterward.

The second reference to the staircase should use the definite article the because it refers to the specific staircase already mentioned. The article a is used when introducing a singular countable noun for the first time.

× I usually feel tired when I'm using the staircase or when I run if it's a morning run that's when I feel tired or when I just did a lot of work that day and also if I spend a lot of most of my time during the day standing up, that's when I feel tired.

✓ I usually feel tired when I'm using the staircase or when I run, especially in the morning. I also feel tired when I have done a lot of work that day or when I spend most of the day standing up.

The original sentence contains too many ideas joined together without clear punctuation or structure. Dividing it into two sentences makes the conditions easier to understand and avoids a run-on sentence.

× I usually feel tired when I'm using the staircase or when I run if it's a morning run that's when I feel tired or when I just did a lot of work that day and also if I spend a lot of most of my time during the day standing up, that's when I feel tired.

✓ I usually feel tired when I'm using the staircase or when I run, especially in the morning. I also feel tired when I have done a lot of work that day or when I spend most of the day standing up.

A lot of and most cannot be combined in the phrase a lot of most of my time. Use most of my time when referring to the majority of your time, or a lot of my time when referring to a large amount of time.

× When I feel tired, I usually sit down and catch a break. This helps me relax my nerves calm down.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually sit down and take a break. This helps me relax and calm down.

The phrase relax my nerves calm down has an incorrect structure because it combines two verb phrases without a suitable conjunction. The verbs relax and calm down can be coordinated with and. Take a break is also the grammatically appropriate expression.

× Another thing is when I feel tired I have a shortness of breath and sitting down and maybe having a glass of water will help me calm down, catch my breath.

✓ Another thing is that when I feel tired, I have shortness of breath, and sitting down and having a glass of water help me calm down and catch my breath.

Shortness of breath is an uncountable expression, so it does not normally take the article a. The sentence also needs that and and to connect its clauses and verb phrases clearly.

× Another thing is when I feel tired I have a shortness of breath and sitting down and maybe having a glass of water will help me calm down, catch my breath.

✓ Another thing is that when I feel tired, I have shortness of breath, and sitting down and having a glass of water help me calm down and catch my breath.

The verbs calm down and catch my breath are two coordinated actions, so they should be joined with and rather than separated by a comma. The conjunction makes the relationship between the actions clear.

× I won't be feeling tired for like a very long time but right after I can do anything I want.

✓ I won't feel tired anymore, and right after that, I can do anything I want.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses without clear punctuation or a conjunction. Adding and and that creates a complete and well-structured sentence.