疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct topic sentence first, such as “Yes, I often feel tired.” Correct the grammar in “I am high school student” and avoid repeating “activities” and “tired.” Use more natural phrases such as “a lot of homework,” “take part in extracurricular activities,” and “my schedule is hectic.” You can finish with one concise result to keep the answer effective and within four or five sentences.

範例: Yes, I often feel tired because I’m a high school student with a lot of homework and extracurricular activities. My schedule is usually hectic, so I sometimes feel overwhelmed by the end of the day. However, I still manage to get everything done.

建議: Answer the question directly by identifying a specific time when you feel tired. The response is incomplete and contains an unclear phrase, “I always my goal is to rest.” Also, use the correct spelling “extracurricular,” and explain the situation with a complete sentence and a specific result.

範例: I usually feel tired in the evening, especially after a long day at school and several extracurricular activities. By the time I get home, I just want to rest and have some quiet time before doing my homework.

建議: The answer is relevant and includes clear examples, but some expressions are unnatural. Say “lying down” rather than “laying down,” and replace “creating stuff” with a more precise phrase such as “doing something creative.” Link the examples smoothly and use a clear topic sentence followed by the effect of these activities.

範例: When I feel tired, I usually relax by listening to music or doing something creative. I enjoy painting and writing because these hobbies help me switch off from schoolwork. As a result, I feel calmer and more refreshed without necessarily going to sleep.

建議: The answer gives a clear reason and specific details, but begin with a direct “Yes” or “No.” Add punctuation or linking words to avoid a run-on sentence, and replace “people I can’t say no to” with a more natural expression such as “I find it hard to turn them down.” Avoid repeating “feel” by using alternatives such as “reassured,” “supported,” or “at ease.”

範例: Yes, I still go out with my friends when I feel tired, although I usually choose a quiet activity. I find it hard to turn them down because they are very supportive and always encourage me. Spending time with them makes me feel reassured and helps me relax.

× I am high school student, so I often feel tired because there are lots of homework, a lot of activities which I participate in.

✓ I am a high school student, so I often feel tired because there are lots of homework, a lot of activities which I participate in.

A singular countable noun such as student requires an article. Use a before high school student because you are referring to one student in a general way.

× I am high school student, so I often feel tired because there are lots of homework, a lot of activities which I participate in.

✓ I am a high school student, so I often feel tired because there is lots of homework, a lot of activities which I participate in.

Homework is an uncountable noun, so it takes the singular verb is in a there-be construction. Use there is lots of homework, not there are lots of homework.

× As I said, I take part in many extracricular activities which makes me feel so tired and after a long day I always my goal is to rest and

✓ As I said, I take part in many extracricular activities which make me feel so tired, and after a long day, my goal is always to rest.

The relative pronoun which refers to the plural noun activities, so the verb must be make rather than makes. The sentence also needs a clear subject and verb in the second part: my goal is always to rest.

× As I said, I take part in many extracricular activities which makes me feel so tired and after a long day I always my goal is to rest and

✓ As I said, I take part in many extracricular activities which make me feel so tired, and after a long day, my goal is always to rest.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains the disconnected phrase I always my goal is to rest and. Use the complete structure my goal is always to rest and remove the unfinished final and.

× I rest but my kind of resting is not laying down and sleeping.

✓ I rest, but my kind of resting is not lying down and sleeping.

The verb lie means to recline or be in a horizontal position, while lay means to put something somewhere. Because the intended meaning is reclining, use the -ing form lying.

× My hobbies, for example, painting or writing, and it makes me feel really relaxed.

✓ My hobbies are, for example, painting and writing, and they make me feel really relaxed.

The original sentence is not complete because My hobbies is not followed by a suitable main verb. Add are to form the sentence correctly. Also, the plural subject hobbies should be referred to with they, not it.

× My friends are people I can't say no to they always try to make me feel better, complimenting me, telling me that I'm doing a good job.

✓ My friends are people I can't say no to. They always try to make me feel better by complimenting me and telling me that I'm doing a good job.

Two independent clauses are incorrectly joined without punctuation. Separate them with a full stop. The phrase by complimenting me and telling me clearly explains how they try to make you feel better.