疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition. The phrases “I think yes, of course I do,” “it feels more tired,” and “it feels okay” are unnatural or repetitive. Clarify your study schedule by saying “from seven to nine” or “for seven to nine hours,” and use linking words such as “because” and “however” to organize your ideas. Also, say “I feel tired” rather than “it feels tired.”

範例: Yes, I often feel tired because I am a high school senior preparing for important exams. I usually study from seven to nine every evening, so my schedule can be exhausting. However, spending time with my friends helps me relax and feel better.

建議: Use the present tense because you are describing a regular situation: “I feel tired” rather than “I will feel tired.” The expression “the period before my period” is understandable but can be expressed more naturally as “just before my period.” Avoid fillers such as “like” and improve word choice: “my mood changes a lot” is more natural than “a large variation of my feelings.”

範例: I usually feel tired just before my period because my mood changes a lot during that time. I may suddenly feel sad and then happy within a short period. These emotional changes can be quite exhausting.

建議: State your main action clearly at the beginning and remove repeated phrases such as “I actually think I think I actually.” The phrase “I can't forget all of the things” does not express your meaning; you probably mean “I can forget about my worries.” Use natural vocabulary such as “the taste of the food distracts me” or “helps me take my mind off things.”

範例: When I feel tired, I usually eat something comforting, such as noodles or chocolate. The taste helps me take my mind off my worries for a while. After eating, I normally feel more relaxed and energetic.

建議: Your answer is relevant and includes a clear reason, but it contains too many fillers and repeated uses of “because.” Say “I choose to spend time with my friends” instead of “I have to like spend my time,” and use the uncountable noun “advice,” not “advices.” Organize the answer with a clear sequence: answer, reason, and result.

範例: Yes, I still go out with my friends when I feel tired because talking to them helps me relieve stress. They often give me useful advice and help me see my problems more clearly. As a result, I usually feel much better afterward.

× I think yes, of course I do because I'm a high school student and since I'm a senior in my high school it feels more tired because I have to study for like seven to nine almost every day and feels so tired but it's okay because I spend most of the time with my friends so it feels okay.

✓ Yes, I do. Since I am a high school student and a senior in high school, I feel more tired because I have to study from seven to nine almost every day. However, it is okay because I spend most of my time with my friends, so I feel okay.

The adjective tired describes a person who experiences tiredness, so the subject should be I, not it. Use I feel tired rather than it feels tired. Also, high school normally does not need the possessive phrase my high school in this context.

× I think yes, of course I do because I'm a high school student and since I'm a senior in my high school it feels more tired because I have to study for like seven to nine almost every day and feels so tired but it's okay because I spend most of the time with my friends so it feels okay.

✓ Yes, I do. Since I am a high school student and a senior in high school, I feel more tired because I have to study from seven to nine almost every day. However, it is okay because I spend most of my time with my friends, so I feel okay.

Use from and to, or from and until, to describe the beginning and ending times of a period. Therefore, study from seven to nine is correct, not study for seven to nine.

× I think yes, of course I do because I'm a high school student and since I'm a senior in my high school it feels more tired because I have to study for like seven to nine almost every day and feels so tired but it's okay because I spend most of the time with my friends so it feels okay.

✓ Yes, I do. Since I am a high school student and a senior in high school, I feel more tired because I have to study from seven to nine almost every day. However, it is okay because I spend most of my time with my friends, so I feel okay.

The subject I takes the base form feel, not feels. The phrase and feels so tired also needs an explicit subject: I feel so tired.

× I will feel tired like the period before my period because that period actually makes me like have like a large variation of my feelings. I feel suddenly sadness, sudden happiness, like all in just once, so I feel tired.

✓ I feel tired during the period before my period because that time causes large fluctuations in my emotions. I suddenly feel sad or happy, sometimes all at once, so I feel tired.

The question asks about a usual situation, so the present simple is more appropriate than the future form will feel. Use I feel tired to describe a recurring experience.

× I will feel tired like the period before my period because that period actually makes me like have like a large variation of my feelings. I feel suddenly sadness, sudden happiness, like all in just once, so I feel tired.

✓ I feel tired during the period before my period because that time causes large fluctuations in my emotions. I suddenly feel sad or happy, sometimes all at once, so I feel tired.

Use during to refer to a time period. The expression all at once is also the correct fixed expression, not all in just once.

× I will feel tired like the period before my period because that period actually makes me like have like a large variation of my feelings. I feel suddenly sadness, sudden happiness, like all in just once, so I feel tired.

✓ I feel tired during the period before my period because that time causes large fluctuations in my emotions. I suddenly feel sad or happy, sometimes all at once, so I feel tired.

After feel, use adjectives such as sad and happy, not the nouns sadness and happiness. The adverb suddenly should come before the verb phrase: I suddenly feel sad.

× I will feel tired like the period before my period because that period actually makes me like have like a large variation of my feelings. I feel suddenly sadness, sudden happiness, like all in just once, so I feel tired.

✓ I feel tired during the period before my period because that time causes large fluctuations in my emotions. I suddenly feel sad or happy, sometimes all at once, so I feel tired.

The structure makes me like have is incomplete and contains unnecessary filler words. Use causes large fluctuations in my emotions or makes me experience large fluctuations in my emotions.

× Yes, I do because I have to like spend my time with my friends to relieve my stress or because talking to my friends actually benefits me because they like give some advices to me that will be really helpful and that way I feel really good after that.

✓ Yes, I do. I spend time with my friends to relieve my stress because talking to them benefits me. They give me some advice that is really helpful, and I feel much better afterward.

Advice is an uncountable noun and does not normally take the plural form advices. Say some advice or pieces of advice. Because advice is treated as singular, use is really helpful.

× Yes, I do because I have to like spend my time with my friends to relieve my stress or because talking to my friends actually benefits me because they like give some advices to me that will be really helpful and that way I feel really good after that.

✓ Yes, I do. I spend time with my friends to relieve my stress because talking to them benefits me. They give me some advice that is really helpful, and I feel much better afterward.

The original sentence uses or and because repeatedly, which creates an unclear sentence structure. Use one clear because clause to explain the reason, and separate the additional ideas into shorter sentences.