疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: A resposta é relevante e inclui uma causa e consequências, mas é demasiado longa e contém uma frase muito extensa, o que reduz a naturalidade e a clareza. Diga a resposta directamente e organize os detalhes com conectores simples. Corrija “working the morning” para “working in the morning” e evite repetir “I feel tired” e “the day”.

範例: Yes, I do. I have a hectic schedule because I work in the morning and sometimes take evening shifts as well. As a result, I often feel exhausted by the end of the day, which affects both my sleep and my mood.

建議: A resposta apresenta claramente o momento e explica a relação entre o sono e o estado de espírito. No entanto, “I guess” é repetido, “a fair sleep” não é uma expressão natural neste contexto e “feel the weight of the world on my shoulders” é um pouco dramático para uma resposta curta. Use uma formulação mais natural, como “if I haven’t had enough sleep”, e ligue as ideias com “because” ou “so”.

範例: I usually feel tired in the morning, especially when I haven’t had enough sleep. Sleep has a big effect on my mood, so I often feel drained and less motivated when I wake up after a restless night.

建議: A resposta é bem estruturada e fornece uma consequência concreta, mas algumas expressões não são naturais: diga “lie down for a while” em vez de “lay down for a beat”, e “increase my concentration and energy” em vez de “boost my concentration and also my energy”. Evite “so that way” e “as a consequence” na mesma frase; um único conector torna a resposta mais fluida.

範例: I usually take it easy and, if I have time, I lie down for a while or take a short nap. This helps me regain my energy and concentrate better, so I can get back to my household chores and work.

建議: A resposta responde directamente e apresenta uma justificação específica, mas “protect my energy at any cost” soa demasiado forte e “not feeling to be surrounded by people” está incorrecto; diga “not in the mood to be around people”. Para falar de amigos, “plans” ou “get-togethers” é mais natural do que “appointments”, e “understanding” deve ser usado em vez de “understandable”. Corrija também “schedule routine” para “busy schedule”.

範例: No, I usually don’t. If I’m exhausted or not in the mood to be around people, I tend to cancel my plans and stay at home. My friends are understanding because they know I have two jobs as well as my studies to manage.

× Yes I do. I believe that I feel tired because I have a hectic routine with working the morning, starting the afternoon, and sometimes I pick some shifts during the evening that I just feel exhausted at the end of the day, and this can impact the way I sleep and also my mood throughout the course of the day.

✓ Yes, I do. I believe that I feel tired because I have a hectic routine, working in the morning, starting in the afternoon, and sometimes picking up shifts during the evening, so I just feel exhausted at the end of the day, and this can impact the way I sleep and also my mood throughout the day.

The preposition in is required before parts of the day: in the morning and in the afternoon. The preposition during is correctly used with the evening. Using the correct prepositions makes the time expressions grammatically accurate.

× Yes I do. I believe that I feel tired because I have a hectic routine with working the morning, starting the afternoon, and sometimes I pick some shifts during the evening that I just feel exhausted at the end of the day, and this can impact the way I sleep and also my mood throughout the course of the day.

✓ Yes, I do. I believe that I feel tired because I have a hectic routine, working in the morning, starting in the afternoon, and sometimes picking up shifts during the evening, so I just feel exhausted at the end of the day, and this can impact the way I sleep and also my mood throughout the day.

The clause that I just feel exhausted is not correctly connected to the preceding information. The conjunction so is needed to show the result: the demanding routine causes the speaker to feel exhausted.

× Yes I do. I believe that I feel tired because I have a hectic routine with working the morning, starting the afternoon, and sometimes I pick some shifts during the evening that I just feel exhausted at the end of the day, and this can impact the way I sleep and also my mood throughout the course of the day.

✓ Yes, I do. I believe that I feel tired because I have a hectic routine. I work in the morning, start again in the afternoon, and sometimes pick up shifts during the evening, so I feel exhausted at the end of the day. This can affect the way I sleep and my mood throughout the day.

The original response combines several independent ideas in one very long sentence, which makes the structure difficult to follow. Dividing it into shorter sentences creates clearer clauses and improves grammatical organization.

× I usually like to take it easy throughout my day when I'm feeling tired. Sometimes when I have time I lay down for a beat and take a nap so that way I can boost my concentration and also my energy and as a consequence, I feel more active to do my household chores and even at work.

✓ I usually like to take it easy throughout my day when I'm feeling tired. Sometimes, when I have time, I lie down for a while and take a nap so that I can boost my concentration and energy. As a consequence, I feel active enough to do my household chores and work.

The adjective active should be followed by enough before an infinitive when expressing the necessary degree or ability: active enough to do. The phrase more active to do is not grammatically appropriate in this context.

× No, I don't. I like to protect my energy at any cost. So if I'm exhausted or not feeling to be surrounded by people, I just cancel any appointments or catch ups with them. They're very understandable when it comes to my schedule routine because they are aware that I have two jobs and also have my studies to complete.

✓ No, I don't. I like to protect my energy at any cost. So, if I'm exhausted or don't feel like being surrounded by people, I just cancel any appointments or catch-ups with them. They're very understanding when it comes to my schedule because they are aware that I have two jobs and also have my studies to complete.

The expression feel like must be followed by a gerund or -ing form. Because the meaning is passive, being surrounded is required: I don't feel like being surrounded by people.

× No, I don't. I like to protect my energy at any cost. So if I'm exhausted or not feeling to be surrounded by people, I just cancel any appointments or catch ups with them. They're very understandable when it comes to my schedule routine because they are aware that I have two jobs and also have my studies to complete.

✓ No, I don't. I like to protect my energy at any cost. So, if I'm exhausted or don't feel like being surrounded by people, I just cancel any appointments or catch-ups with them. They're very understanding when it comes to my schedule because they are aware that I have two jobs and also have my studies to complete.

Understanding describes people who show sympathy and accept another person's situation. Understandable describes something that can be understood, so it is not the appropriate adjective for the friends in this sentence.