疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 질문에 직접 답했지만 문법적으로 어색한 부분이 있습니다. ‘when I wake up or studying hard’는 ‘when I wake up or study hard’로 수정해야 합니다. 두 상황을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 피곤함의 정도나 이유를 간단히 덧붙이면 더 효과적인 답변이 됩니다.

範例: Yes, I often feel tired when I wake up or study hard. I usually feel especially sleepy in the morning because I do not get enough sleep.

建議: 구체적인 시간과 이유를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 ‘in morning’은 ‘in the morning’, ‘stay at late nights’는 ‘stay up late’로 고쳐야 합니다. 첫 문장의 어순을 정리하고, 늦게 자는 이유나 결과를 연결어로 추가하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

範例: I feel especially tired in the morning when I wake up. This is mainly because I often stay up late studying or watching videos, so I usually want to sleep for a few more hours.

建議: 질문에 직접 답하고 이유도 제시하여 구조가 명확합니다. 다만 ‘tired and exhausted’는 의미가 중복되므로 둘 중 하나만 사용하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 바로 잠드는지, 짧은 휴식을 취하는지 등 구체적인 행동을 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

範例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or go to bed early. I do this because getting enough sleep helps me recover and concentrate better the next day.

建議: ‘Sometimes I do’로 답을 시작한 점은 좋지만, ‘hang out with my friends is’는 ‘hanging out with my friends is’, ‘happy and excited’는 상황에 맞게 ‘fun and enjoyable’로 수정해야 합니다. ‘Ruby were starting’은 의미가 불분명하므로 정확한 활동을 표현해야 합니다. 피곤할 때 외출하는 경우와 집에 쉬는 경우를 비교하면 답변이 더 논리적입니다.

範例: Sometimes I still go out with my friends because hanging out with them is fun and helps me relax. For example, we might watch a movie together or have dinner nearby. However, if I am extremely tired, I prefer to stay home and get some rest.

× Yes I do feel tired when I wake up or studying hard

✓ Yes, I do feel tired when I wake up or study hard.

After or, the two verbs should have the same grammatical form. Wake up and study are both base-form verbs, so studying is changed to study.

× Especially in morning when I wake up I feel very tired because I want to sleep more.

✓ Especially in the morning, when I wake up, I feel very tired because I want to sleep more.

The phrase in the morning requires the definite article the because it refers to a specific part of the day.

× I usually stay at late nights

✓ I usually stay up late at night.

The correct expression is stay up late, meaning remain awake until a late time. At late nights is not a natural prepositional phrase in this context.

× Sometimes I do because hang out with my friends is very happy and excited, watching Ruby were starting together

✓ Sometimes I do because hanging out with my friends is fun and exciting, and we watch movies together.

When a verb functions as the subject of a sentence, it should use the -ing form. Therefore, hang out becomes hanging out.

× Sometimes I do because hang out with my friends is very happy and excited, watching Ruby were starting together

✓ Sometimes I do because hanging out with my friends is fun and exciting, and we watch movies together.

Happy and excited usually describe people, not activities. Fun and exciting are more appropriate adjectives for describing the activity of spending time with friends.

× Sometimes I do because hang out with my friends is very happy and excited, watching Ruby were starting together

✓ Sometimes I do because hanging out with my friends is fun and exciting, and we watch movies together.

The final part, watching Ruby were starting together, does not form a clear grammatical clause. Use a subject and a correctly formed verb, such as we watch movies together. Also, use and to connect the two related ideas clearly.