疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly with “Yes, I often do.” Avoid the redundant phrase “currently now,” and use more natural expressions such as “my heavy workload” and “work schedule.” Add one brief result to make the answer more developed.

範例: Yes, I often do, mainly because I have a heavy workload and a demanding work schedule. By the end of the day, I usually feel exhausted and need some quiet time to recharge.

建議: Use a clear time expression, such as “I usually feel tired after work.” Replace “toxic environment” with “stressful work environment” unless you explain the situation. The phrase “compare and say something to my work” is unclear; say that your team leader compares your performance with others or criticizes your work.

範例: I usually feel tired after a long day at work, especially when the atmosphere is stressful. For example, my team leader often compares my performance with my colleagues’ and criticizes my work, which is emotionally exhausting.

建議: Your answer gives relevant activities, but improve the grammar and naturalness: say “I bake” instead of “I do baking,” and “take a break from social media” instead of “detoxing to social media.” Use linking words to organize the activities and avoid repeating “I love.”

範例: When I feel tired, I usually bake something simple because it helps me relax. I also take a break from social media and get some rest so that both my mind and body can recover.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repeating “because I feel tired.” Change “my body needed” to “my body needs,” and replace “graveyardship” with “night shifts” or “the night shift.” Use a more natural phrase such as “I usually stay home and sleep.”

範例: No, I usually stay home when I feel tired because my body needs rest after working night shifts. For example, even when I have free time on Saturdays, I prefer to sleep and recover rather than go out with my friends.

× Currently now yes, I often feel tired because of the workload and schedule of work I have.

✓ Currently, yes, I often feel tired because of the workload and work schedule I have.

Currently and now have similar meanings, so using both together is redundant. Place Currently at the beginning of the sentence, followed by a comma. In addition, work schedule is the natural noun phrase.

× I often feel tired lately because of the toxic environment especially in my work.

✓ I often feel tired because of the toxic environment, especially at work.

The preposition at is used in the expression at work. The phrase in my work is not natural when referring to the workplace. A comma is also needed before the additional information especially at work.

× For example, my team leader will always compare and say something to my work.

✓ For example, my team leader always compares my work with other people's work and says negative things about it.

This sentence describes a repeated present habit, so use the present simple rather than will. With the singular subject my team leader, the verbs need the third-person singular forms compares and says.

× For example, my team leader will always compare and say something to my work.

✓ For example, my team leader always compares my work with other people's work and says negative things about it.

The verb compare is normally followed by with when identifying the things being compared. Also, say something to my work is not a natural expression; say negative things about my work or say negative things about it is more appropriate.

× When I feel tired I always do baking and I personally love detoxing to social media and I love resting so that my mind and body will feel at ease.

✓ When I feel tired, I always bake, and I personally love taking a break from social media. I also love resting so that my mind and body can feel at ease.

The original sentence joins too many independent ideas with and, which makes its structure difficult to follow. Divide the ideas into two sentences and use the natural verb bake instead of do baking. Use take a break from social media rather than detoxing to social media.

× When I feel tired I always do baking and I personally love detoxing to social media and I love resting so that my mind and body will feel at ease.

✓ When I feel tired, I always bake, and I personally love taking a break from social media. I also love resting so that my mind and body can feel at ease.

The correct preposition in this meaning is from: take a break from social media. The preposition to is incorrect in this expression.

× No, I don't usually go out with my friends when I feel tired because my body needed to rest and sleep.

✓ No, I don't usually go out with my friends when I feel tired because my body needs to rest and sleep.

This sentence describes a general or repeated situation, so use the present tense needs rather than the past tense needed. Because body is singular, the verb must end in -s.

× For example, every Saturday, even if I have the time to go out, I choose to rest because I feel tired because I work at graveyardship.

✓ For example, every Saturday, even if I have time to go out, I choose to rest because I feel tired because I work the graveyard shift.

Graveyardship is not the standard expression; the correct phrase is graveyard shift. When referring to a regular specific work schedule, use the definite article the: work the graveyard shift. Also, time is generally uncountable in this context, so have time is more natural than have the time.