疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly with a natural topic sentence, then explain your long working hours and their result. Correct the grammar and word choice: say “I work long hours” instead of “I work in a laboratory for a long time,” “conducting experiments continuously” instead of “the continuous experimentally,” and “I just want to go home” instead of “after doing everything I wanted to go home.” Avoid repeating “so” and keep the answer to two or three clear sentences.

範例: Yes, I often feel tired these days because I work long hours in a laboratory, usually from nine in the morning until nine at night. Conducting experiments for so many hours is exhausting, so I usually just want to go home and rest afterward.

建議: Describe the situation accurately and avoid repeating the same idea with “tired” and “exhausted.” Use “work in a laboratory,” not “walk in a laboratory,” and say “late at night,” not “at late night.” The final phrase is unclear; if you mean resting, say “I go home to get some rest.” Use one appropriate linking word instead of repeating “so.”

範例: I usually feel tired when I work in the laboratory for several hours, especially late at night. By then, I find it difficult to concentrate, so I go home and get some rest.

建議: Give a clear answer and explain how the action helps you. The phrase “for use in food” is irrelevant or unclear, “lavatory” should be “laboratory,” and “to full perform” should be “to perform my experiments effectively.” Also, cold water may refresh you, but it does not usually “relieve stress”; “help me feel more awake” is more natural. Avoid repeating “cold water” and use a clear cause-and-effect structure.

範例: When I feel tired, I usually drink a glass of water and take a short break. This helps me feel more awake, especially when I need to continue working in the laboratory late at night. If I am extremely tired, I take a quick walk to refresh myself.

建議: Your main idea is clear, but improve the collocations and grammar. Say “I prefer not to meet my friends” rather than “I don’t prefer meeting,” “taking a nap” rather than “getting nap,” and “restore my energy” rather than “energize and represent for my body.” Use a natural reason and correct capitalization. Adding a contrast, such as meeting friends when you feel only slightly tired, would make the answer more developed.

範例: When I feel tired, I usually prefer not to go out with my friends because taking a nap helps me restore my energy. However, if I am only slightly tired, I might still meet them for a quiet meal or coffee.

× So the continuous experimentally me exhausted, so after doing everything I wanted to go home.

✓ Continuous experiments exhaust me, so after finishing everything, I want to go home.

The original sentence does not have a correct subject-verb structure. Continuous experimentally is not a grammatical noun phrase. Use continuous experiments as the subject and exhaust as the verb. Because this describes a usual situation, use the present tense want rather than the past tense wanted.

× I usually feel tired when I walk in a laboratory for a long time, especially at late night.

✓ I usually feel tired when I work in a laboratory for a long time, especially late at night.

The sentence describes a regular or repeated situation, so the present tense is appropriate. The phrase late at night is the standard expression; do not use at before late in this expression.

× I usually feel tired when I walk in a laboratory for a long time, especially at late night.

✓ I usually feel tired when I work in a laboratory for a long time, especially late at night.

The preposition pattern is late at night, not at late night. Also, work in a laboratory is appropriate for describing your job or activity in the laboratory.

× So I go to home to take a lesson.

✓ So I go home to rest.

Home is used without the preposition to when it follows go, come, or similar movement verbs. Therefore, say go home, not go to home. The expression take a lesson does not fit the intended meaning; rest is grammatically and contextually appropriate here.

× So for use in food, when I walk in a lavatory at late at night to full perform the experiments well I drink the cold water.

✓ For example, when I work in a laboratory late at night, I drink cold water so that I can perform the experiments well.

Full is an adjective, but an adverb is needed to modify perform, so fully would be required. However, the more natural structure is so that I can perform the experiments well. The sentence also needs clearer word order and punctuation.

× So for use in food, when I walk in a lavatory at late at night to full perform the experiments well I drink the cold water.

✓ For example, when I work in a laboratory late at night, I drink cold water so that I can perform the experiments well.

The correct time expression is late at night, not at late at night. The phrase for example also correctly introduces an example, whereas for use in food is not a suitable prepositional phrase in this context.

× It makes me relieve stress.

✓ It helps me relieve stress.

The verb make normally requires an object followed by the base verb, as in It makes me feel better. For the intended meaning, help is more suitable and can be followed by the base verb relieve: helps me relieve stress.

× When I feel tired, I don't prefer meeting my friends because Getting nap is more helpful for me to energize and represent for my body.

✓ When I feel tired, I do not prefer meeting my friends because taking a nap helps me regain my energy and recover.

A singular countable noun needs an article, so say taking a nap or getting a nap, not Getting nap. The revised sentence also uses a clearer verb structure after because. Taking a nap helps me is grammatically natural because helps agrees with the singular subject taking a nap.

× When I feel tired, I don't prefer meeting my friends because Getting nap is more helpful for me to energize and represent for my body.

✓ When I feel tired, I do not prefer meeting my friends because taking a nap helps me regain my energy and recover.

The phrase more helpful for me to energize and represent for my body is not correctly structured and does not express the intended meaning. Use helps me regain my energy and recover, in which helps is followed by an object and the base verbs regain and recover.