疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "and and"). Use correct tense and articles.

範例: Yes, I often feel tired. Recently I haven’t been getting enough sleep because I stay up late studying for school and preparing for university entrance exams, so I usually feel exhausted by the morning.

建議: Give a focused topic sentence then one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Correct subject-verb agreement and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

範例: I usually feel tired during the day, especially while I’m at school, because I stay up late studying for exams at night, so my body is still in a late-night rhythm.

建議: Use present simple consistently and be specific about habits. Include a linking word to connect actions and reasons. Use correct verb forms and plural agreement.

範例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or drink coffee or an energy drink to wake up, because a brief rest or caffeine helps me focus again.

建議: Start with a direct answer, then briefly explain with one clear reason using a linking word. Avoid repeating synonyms and correct subject-verb agreement.

範例: No, I usually refuse to go out when I’m tired, because being exhausted makes social activities less enjoyable and I prefer to rest at home so I can recover.

× It has been months now since I didn't have enough sleep and and I just sleep late every night because I have to study for school and prepare myself for universities.

✓ It has been months now since I haven't had enough sleep, and I just sleep late every night because I have to study for school and prepare myself for university.

The original mixes present perfect 'It has been months' with a simple past 'I didn't have', which is inconsistent. Use the present perfect negative 'I haven't had' to indicate a period continuing up to now. Also use singular 'university' (more natural) and remove the duplicated 'and'. Suggestion: Use consistent tense (present perfect) to match 'It has been months' and simplify vocabulary ('university').

× I often feel tired during the day or the time that I'm at school because my body just get used to the feeling of being awake at night because I usually need to stay awake and study for the exams at night.

✓ I often feel tired during the day or when I'm at school because my body just gets used to being awake at night, as I usually need to stay up and study for exams.

The verb 'get' should agree with singular subject 'my body' and become 'gets'. 'The time that I'm at school' is wordy; 'when I'm at school' is smoother. 'Get used to the feeling of being awake' can be shortened to 'gets used to being awake'. Use 'stay up' rather than 'stay awake' for studying at night and drop the extra 'the' before 'exams'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with subject and prefer concise phrasing.

× When I feel tired, I often had a short nap or get some drinks that keeps me awake like coffee or cold drinks that boost my energy.

✓ When I feel tired, I often have a short nap or get some drinks that keep me awake, like coffee or cold drinks that boost my energy.

The sentence mixes present simple 'When I feel tired' with past 'I often had'. Use present simple 'have' to match the habitual action. 'Keeps' should be 'keep' to agree with plural subject 'drinks'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habitual actions and match verb number to the subject.

× When I feel tired, I often refuse to go out with my friends because I just hate the feeling of going out with tiredness and exhaustion and it just make the activity less entertaining.

✓ When I feel tired, I often refuse to go out with my friends because I hate the feeling of going out when I'm tired and exhausted, and it just makes the activity less enjoyable.

'Make' must be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Going out with tiredness' is unnatural; use 'going out when I'm tired'. Replace 'entertaining' with 'enjoyable' for better collocation. Remove redundant 'just'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and use natural collocations ('when I'm tired', 'less enjoyable').