疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Mejora la claridad y la gramática: usa oraciones más cortas y directas, corrige errores como "becomes started" y estructuración (por ejemplo, "after a long period of training" en lugar de "large period"). Añade una frase de apoyo concreta usando una conexión como "because" o "for example".

範例: No, I don't. I'm usually quite energetic. For example, even after a long training session or a hard day at work I tend to recover quickly, so I still feel active.

建議: Corrige la repetición y completa la idea: evita duplicar palabras ("stress stressful") y termina la oración. Usa conectores como "for example" o "especially" y da detalles específicos sobre situaciones que te cansan.

範例: I usually feel tired after a long, stressful day at work. For example, if I have many deadlines or an intense gym session, I feel exhausted and need rest afterward.

建議: Mejora la gramática y la coherencia: usa tiempos y formas correctas ("on the sofa", "watching TV"). Evita frases redundantes como "something that I like" y utiliza conectores como "then" o "so" para enlazar acciones.

範例: When I'm tired, I usually relax on the sofa and watch a TV series or a movie. Then I have a nice dinner at home and rest, doing very little.

建議: Arregla errores léxicos y de estructura: "going up with my friends" es incorrecto (use "go out"). Completa la idea final y usa conectores como "however" o "if". Sé específico sobre qué actividades evitarías.

範例: Yes, sometimes I still go out with friends, but I consider the plan first. For example, I will definitely go to a friend's birthday, but if the activity involves a lot of exercise, I probably won't join.

× I'm a very energetic and active person who becomes started after a large period of training, for example, or a very hard job activities, but I usually feel very active.

✓ I'm a very energetic and active person who gets started after a long period of training or after very hard job activities, and I usually feel very active.

The phrase 'becomes started' is incorrect; English uses 'get started' to mean 'begin'. 'A large period' should be 'a long period' for natural collocation. 'Job activities' is awkward; 'work' or 'job tasks' is better. Use 'and' to link clauses rather than a comma before 'but' when meaning addition. Suggestion: use 'gets started' and simplify the list of causes. Examples to practice: 'I get started after a long training session.' 'I feel active after hard work.'

× I usually feel tired after a long day with a lot of stress stressful issues for example at work or maybe if I have an intense training or gym, but I feel tired when they

✓ I usually feel tired after a long day with a lot of stressful issues, for example at work, or if I have an intense training session at the gym.

The phrase 'a lot of stress stressful issues' repeats meaning and uses the wrong form 'stressful' after 'stress'. Use either 'a lot of stress' or 'stressful issues'. 'Intense training or gym' is ungrammatical; say 'intense training session at the gym'. The trailing fragment 'but I feel tired when they' is incomplete and must be removed. Suggestion: keep parallel structures and avoid redundant adjectives.

× When I feel tired, I like to relax in the sofa watching a TV series or a movie, maybe having a good dinner, something that I like.

✓ When I feel tired, I like to relax on the sofa watching a TV series or a movie, maybe have a good dinner, something that I enjoy.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'sofa' not 'in'. 'Watching a TV series or a movie' is fine; 'having a good dinner' is acceptable but parallelism prefers 'maybe have a good dinner'. 'Something that I like' is awkward; use 'something that I enjoy'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'on' and keep verb forms parallel.

× I ask for food at home and doing nothing.

✓ I order food to eat at home and do nothing.

The original mixes structures: 'I ask for food at home' is literal and informal; native speakers say 'order food' or 'have food delivered'. Also 'and doing nothing' is a non-finite clause inconsistent with 'I order'; use 'and do nothing' for parallel verb forms. Suggestion: use 'order' and maintain consistent verb forms.

× Yes, sometimes I'm still going up with my friends but I take into account the plan or the activity we are going to do for example it's the birthday of a friend, then I will go for sure.

✓ Yes, sometimes I still go out with my friends, but I take the plan or the activity into account. For example, if it is a friend's birthday, then I will definitely go.

'I'm still going up with my friends' is incorrect: 'go out with my friends' is the intended phrase. 'Go up' is wrong preposition and verb. 'Take into account the plan' should be 'take the plan into account' for correct word order. 'the birthday of a friend' is better as 'a friend's birthday'. Use 'will definitely go' or 'I will definitely go' for emphasis. Suggestion: practice common collocations: 'go out with', 'take into account', 'a friend's birthday'.

× But if there is an activity that requires exercise, I want.

✓ But if there is an activity that requires physical exertion, I prefer not to go.

The sentence 'I want' is incomplete and unclear. Likely the student meant they do not want to participate in exercise activities. 'Requires exercise' is understandable but 'physical exertion' or 'exercise' is fine; add 'prefer not to go' or 'I won't go' to complete the thought. Suggestion: complete sentences with a clear verb and object, e.g., 'I prefer not to go' or 'I usually avoid those activities.'