疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the verb phrases and be concise. Add a specific reason using linking words. For example, say when and why you feel tired and avoid awkward phrasing like “walk too many long.”

範例: Yes, I do. I often feel tired in the evenings because I walk for long periods to and from university, so I’m usually exhausted by the end of the day.

建議: Answer directly with a clear time frame and correct verb forms. Use linking words to explain the cause and give a specific detail about what makes you tired. Replace vague phrase “started too much” with a clear activity description.

範例: I usually feel tired after school, especially when I have had a heavy workload or many extracurricular activities, because I get little time to rest between classes and commitments.

建議: Be a bit more specific and use linking words to connect ideas. Mention what your favorite activity is and explain why it helps, then add the routine for sleeping. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and natural phrasing.

範例: When I feel tired, I usually relax by reading a novel or listening to music because it helps me unwind. After that, I try to take a short nap or go to bed early to recharge for the next day.

× I sometimes feel tired because I walk too many long.

✓ I sometimes feel tired because I walk for too long.

The error is incorrect use of quantifier and word order with duration. 'Too many long' is ungrammatical; use 'for too long' to indicate duration of walking. Suggestion: use 'for' with time expressions (for an hour, for too long) or say 'I walk too much' for frequency/amount.

× I often feel tired after school, especially when I started too much.

✓ I often feel tired after school, especially when I study too much.

The verb 'started' is past tense and does not fit the habitual present context introduced by 'I often feel' and 'especially when'. Use present tense 'study' to match the habitual action. Also 'too much' correctly follows the verb to indicate excessive amount.

× I often do my favorite activity and sleep.

✓ I usually do my favorite activities and then sleep.

The original is grammatically understandable but sounds slightly awkward and mismatches number and sequence. Change 'often' to 'usually' for naturalness, pluralize 'activity' to 'activities' if referring to hobbies in general, and add 'then' to show sequence. This improves clarity and natural sentence flow.