疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using a clear topic sentence, correcting grammar, and trimming redundancy. Include one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I feel tired almost every day because my job is physically demanding. For example, as a physiotherapist I spend hours helping patients with exercises and then I also have to complete paperwork afterwards, which leaves me exhausted by the end of the day.

建議: State the main time clearly, then add a brief specific example or routine using a linking phrase for coherence. Fix small grammar/word-choice errors.

範例: I usually feel tired after work, typically after five in the evening when my shift ends. I also feel worn out after my Saturday park run because the combination of exercise and a busy week makes me more fatigued.

建議: Organize your response with a clear sequence of actions and correct verb forms. Use linking words (first, then, finally) and avoid repetitions to make it concise and natural.

範例: First, I take a quick shower and have something to eat to recharge. Then I usually sit in a chair and listen to music to unwind, and finally when I feel sleepy I turn off my phone and lights and go to bed to sleep.

× Absolutely every single day I've all tired.

✓ Absolutely, every single day I'm tired.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and a nonstandard contraction 'I've all tired' which is ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error: the subject and verb should be 'I am' (I'm) followed by the adjective 'tired'. Also add a comma after 'Absolutely' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I'm tired' or 'I feel tired every single day.'

× This is because of the nature of the job that I do.

✓ This is because of the nature of the job I do.

The phrase 'the job that I do' is grammatical but wordy; removing 'that' improves naturalness. This is a minor sentence structure issue. Suggestion: omit unnecessary relative pronouns when they are the object of the clause: 'the job I do.'

× I'm a physiotherapist which is physically demanding and having to juggle doing the physiotherapy job but also the administrative work as well.

✓ I'm a physiotherapist, which is physically demanding, and I also have to juggle the physiotherapy work and the administrative tasks.

The sentence mixes structures and lacks a clear subject for the second part. 'Which' should refer to a whole clause and is better set off by commas. 'Having to juggle doing the physiotherapy job' is awkward; use 'I also have to juggle the physiotherapy work and the administrative tasks.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× It's super exhausting

✓ It's super exhausting.

Missing final punctuation in the transcript; grammatically the sentence is fine. Keep the period. Ensure consistency in spoken transcription.

× I feel tired mostly after work so they will be after five PM in the evenings or after park run on Saturdays.

✓ I feel tired mostly after work, so it is usually after five p.m. in the evenings or after the park run on Saturdays.

The original uses 'they will be' which is incorrect for referring to a time; that is a tense/person mismatch. This is a present tense / sentence structure issue. Replace with 'it is usually' or 'it's usually' to indicate typical timing. Also add 'the' before 'park run' if referring to a specific event and normalize time format.

× That's when I feel tired.

✓ That's when I feel tired.

This sentence is grammatical and fits the context. No change needed.

× I quickly take a shower, eat, go on my bed and just sit on a high chair and play some music.

✓ I quickly take a shower, eat, get into bed or sit on a high chair and play some music.

The phrase 'go on my bed' is unidiomatic; use 'get into bed' or 'lie on my bed.' Also 'sit on a high chair' is odd in combination with bed—offer alternatives with 'or'. This fixes verb choice and sentence flow.

× Once I feel I start feeling sleepy, just go in my bed, switch off the lights and switch off my phone and just try to relax and sleep.

✓ Once I start feeling sleepy, I just go to bed, switch off the lights and my phone, and try to relax and sleep.

The original repeats 'feel' awkwardly and omits the subject 'I' before the verbs in the second clause. 'Go in my bed' is incorrect; use 'go to bed'. Combine actions with commas and include 'I' for clarity. This addresses incorrect use of present participle and sentence structure.