疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation words like “maybe.” Use linking words to show contrast (e.g. “but,” “however”) and keep sentences short (max 4–5).

範例: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually have a burst of energy in the morning, but after two to three hours of work I start to feel sleepy, especially around 11:00. At that point I usually take a short nap in my dormitory to recharge.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence and then give a specific reason and an example. Use correct tense and linking words (e.g. “especially,” “so”) and a natural phrase for movement (e.g. “sit still” rather than “didn't have a move”). Keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: I feel tired after working for a long time, especially when I sit still for two or three hours. So I usually stand up and do simple stretches or short exercises to wake myself up.

建議: Answer directly, use natural verbs and correct collocations (e.g. “stretch against a wall,” “walk around my desk,” “get back to work”). Use linking words to connect actions and results (e.g. “so,” “then”). Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: I usually stretch against a wall or walk around my desk for a few minutes. This helps me recharge, so I can get back to work feeling more focused.

× I always feel tired after two or three hours work.

✓ I always feel tired after two or three hours of work.

Missing the preposition 'of' when indicating a period plus a noun; 'hours work' should be 'hours of work' to form a correct noun phrase. Suggestion: use 'hours of work' or 'hours' (e.g., 'after two or three hours of work' or 'after two or three hours').

× Then I need to have a nap back to the dormitory.

✓ Then I need to go back to the dormitory to have a nap.

Word order and verb form are incorrect. 'Have a nap back to the dormitory' is ungrammatical; use 'go back to the dormitory to have a nap' to show purpose. Suggestion: place the movement verb before the purpose clause: 'go back... to have a nap.'

× I always feel tired after a long time work, especially after two or three hours sitting in the chair and didn't have a move.

✓ I always feel tired after working for a long time, especially after sitting in a chair for two or three hours without moving.

Several issues: 'after a long time work' needs rephrasing to 'after working for a long time'; 'two or three hours sitting in the chair' needs 'sitting in a chair for two or three hours'; 'didn't have a move' is unidiomatic and needs 'without moving.' Suggestion: use 'working for' and 'for two or three hours' and 'without moving.'

× Then I like to stand up and do some simple exercise to relax myself.

✓ Then I like to stand up and do some simple exercises to relax.

'Relax myself' is acceptable but often unnecessary; more natural is simply 'to relax.' Also 'exercise' should be plural 'exercises' when referring to some short activities. Suggestion: use 'do some simple exercises to relax.'

× I always stand up to strange myself by the wall or I'll walk around my work position for a few minutes.

✓ I always stand up to stretch by the wall or I walk around my workstation for a few minutes.

'Strange myself' is wrong word choice — should be 'stretch myself' or just 'stretch.' 'Work position' is unnatural; 'workstation' or 'desk' is better. Also avoid contraction mismatch with present habitual: use consistent present simple 'I walk.' Suggestion: 'I stand up to stretch by the wall or walk around my workstation for a few minutes.'

× That's a good way to recharge and refresh myself. I'll back to the work state.

✓ That's a good way to recharge and refresh myself. Then I go back to work.

'I'll back to the work state' is ungrammatical: 'I'll' (I will) plus 'back' lacks a verb. For habitual action use present simple 'I go back to work.' Also 'the work state' is unnatural; use 'work.' Suggestion: use 'Then I go back to work.'