疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use varied vocabulary. Start with a direct response (e.g. "Not usually") then briefly explain with one or two specific details and a linking word. Reduce repetition like "most of the days" and "doing just fine" by consolidating ideas.

範例: Not usually. I only feel tired occasionally, mainly during my menstrual period when I become drained and exhausted. However, for most of the month I have enough energy to carry out my daily activities, such as work and hobbies, provided I get enough sleep.

建議: Give a concise direct answer then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like "that certain phase of my menstrual cycle" and repetitive clauses. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. "during my period" or "in the luteal phase") and mention concrete triggers (lack of sleep, stress) if relevant.

範例: I usually feel tired during my period, because hormonal changes make me feel fatigued. Besides that, I sometimes get tired if I haven’t slept well or if I’ve been under a lot of stress.

建議: Answer directly then give specific, varied coping strategies with linking words. Combine similar ideas and avoid tentative language like "maybe". Mention frequency or effectiveness to make it more informative.

範例: When I feel tired, I listen to my body and rest. For example, I often take a long shower or soak in the bathtub to relax, and I do gentle stretching or breathing exercises before bed to help me sleep better.

× I get easily drained and exhausted.

✓ I become easily drained and exhausted.

The original uses get + past participle which is informal passive; 'become' is clearer for a state change. Use 'become' to describe entering a state.

× there are certain days in the month that I could feel it, especially when I'm on my period there.

✓ there are certain days in the month when I can feel it, especially when I'm on my period.

Replace 'that' with 'when' for time reference and 'could' with 'can' because the speaker describes a habitual present occurrence. Remove the extra 'there' at the end which is redundant.

× But most of the days I'm doing just fine.

✓ But most days I'm fine.

Use simple present for habitual states: 'I'm doing just fine' is wordy and slightly awkward. 'Most days I'm fine' is concise and grammatically natural for habitual statements.

× I can get along on normal basis doing the activities that I like to do.

✓ I can get along on a normal basis by doing the activities I like.

Add article 'a' before 'normal basis', use 'by doing' to show how, and avoid repeating 'do' at the end. This clarifies sentence structure and flow.

× I would usually feel tired if that certain phase of my menstrual cycle that gives me fatigue,

✓ I usually feel tired during that phase of my menstrual cycle that causes fatigue,

Remove conditional 'would' (unnecessary for habitual occurrences) and use 'during' for time. Use 'causes' instead of 'gives' for natural collocation with 'fatigue'.

× but most of the days I do just fine as long as I get enough sleep and properly well rested.

✓ but most days I do just fine as long as I get enough sleep and am properly well rested.

Include the verb 'am' before 'properly well rested' to form correct predicate. Also simplify 'most of the days' to 'most days'.

× When I feel tired I know when to listen to my body and if I feel that I just take it easy and have a nice rest.

✓ When I feel tired, I know to listen to my body; if I feel I need to, I just take it easy and have a good rest.

Remove the redundant 'when' after 'I know', add punctuation, and include 'need to' to clarify the condition. 'Nice rest' is informal; 'good rest' is more natural.

× Maybe do a long shower or relax in the bathtub and just do calming exercises before I go to sleep.

✓ Maybe take a long shower or relax in the bathtub and do calming exercises before I go to sleep.

Use 'take a shower' instead of 'do a shower' (correct verb-object collocation). Remove extra 'just' and maintain parallel structure with verbs 'take', 'relax', 'do'.