疲惫— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers and grammar mistakes (e.g., "more harder" -> "harder"; "I already knew" is unclear). Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so").

範例: Not usually. Only recently I have been more tired because this is my final year at school and I am studying harder for upcoming exams, so I spend much more time revising than before.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers "when" and give a specific situation as supporting detail. Complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like "because" and give concrete reasons or examples (e.g., noisy places, long events).

範例: I feel tired when I have to be in crowded public places. For example, large parties or busy markets drain me because the noise and social interaction make me anxious and mentally overwhelmed.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating your typical action, then list two or three specific activities with brief reasons for each. Use linking words like "so" or "for example" to connect ideas and sound natural.

範例: I usually take some time to myself to recharge. For example, I might watch a film to relax, read a book to calm my mind, or do some drawing because creative activities help me unwind and regain energy.

× Uh, not really only when I have school because this is my last year of school and I try to study more harder and as I have exams I spend more time on studying than before. So this year I I'm getting really tired and I already knew.

✓ Not really, only when I have school, because this is my last year and I try to study harder. As I have exams, I spend more time studying than before, so this year I'm getting really tired and I already knew that.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure issues (run-on sentences, repetition, and awkward phrasing). 'More harder' is incorrect: use either 'harder' or 'more' but not both. 'Spend more time on studying' is awkward; use 'spend more time studying'. The phrase 'I I'm' is a typo/repetition. 'I already knew' needs an object or clause; add 'that' to complete the idea. Suggestions: break into shorter sentences, remove redundant words, use correct comparative 'harder', and use gerund without 'on' after 'spend time'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I'm a really introverted person so I feel tired when I have to be in public to do some stuff because when I see a lot of people I get anxious and overwhelmed because of the amount of.

✓ I'm a very introverted person, so I feel tired when I have to be in public to do things; when I see a lot of people, I get anxious and overwhelmed by the crowd.

This sentence is awkward and incomplete, showing present tense issues and sentence structure problems. 'Really introverted' is acceptable but 'very introverted' is more natural. 'Do some stuff' is informal; use 'do things'. The clause ends with 'because of the amount of.' which is incomplete; replace with 'overwhelmed by the crowd' or 'by the number of people'. Suggestions: complete the thought, choose more precise vocabulary, and maintain consistent present tense verbs ('feel', 'have', 'get'). Grammar problem type ID:6

× I usually try to have some me time because I get energy when I can clear my mind and be with myself. Maybe watch a film, read a book or do some drawing also.

✓ I usually try to have some 'me' time because I regain energy when I can clear my mind and be by myself. I might watch a film, read a book, or do some drawing.

Issues include verb form and informal phrasing. 'Get energy' is understandable but 'regain energy' or 'recharge' is more natural. 'Be with myself' is better phrased as 'be by myself'. The second part lacks a subject and proper modal: start with 'I might' or 'I usually' to make it a full sentence. 'Do some drawing' is acceptable but 'do some drawing' or 'draw' are better; 'do some drawing also' is redundant. Also using gerunds consistently ('watching, reading, drawing') or infinitive/modal + base verb improves fluency. Suggestions: use complete sentences, more natural verbs, and add subject/modal for the activities. Grammar problem type ID:8