礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答“父母教会了我”，再补充一两个具体例子。注意句子之间需要停顿或使用连接词，避免把两个完整句子连在一起；“grizzle”用词错误，可改为“greet them politely”，“give some help”重复，可说“offer help”。描述帮助残障人士时，表达要自然、尊重。

範例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was young. For example, they encouraged me to greet older people respectfully and offer help when someone needed it. They also reminded me to say “please” and “thank you.”

建議: 开头直接表达观点，例如“I think politeness is very important”。“plight”应为“polite”，而“a good manner”在这里不自然，可改为“good manners”。说明原因后即可收尾，避免重复表达“it is good”和“I think it is necessary”；可用“because”或“as a result”连接观点和结果。

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for other people. It also helps us build good relationships and makes everyday conversations more pleasant.

建議: 回答切题，观点清楚，也提供了理由。可以用“because”连接“任何时候都应礼貌”和“每个人都值得尊重”，并避免用逗号连接两个完整句子。若想让内容更具体，可以补充在工作、学校或日常交流中的例子。

範例: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, whether we're at work, school, or in public. This is because everyone deserves respect, regardless of their age or background.

建議: 回答包含了学习方式和具体礼貌用语，内容较完整。注意避免“watching them watching”的重复结构；可以说“by watching how they treated others”。把较长的第二句拆分或用“and”清楚连接，并补充一个实际场景，让例子更具体。

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by saying “please” and “thank you.” I learned these habits by watching my parents speak kindly to others. For example, I would thank people when they helped me.

× Well, my parents told me to be friendly and polite when I was a child they told me that when I met an elder in the street, I should grizzle.

✓ Well, my parents told me to be friendly and polite when I was a child. They told me that when I met an elder in the street, I should grizzle.

原句中的“when I was a child”和“They told me...”之间缺少句号或连接词，导致两个完整句子直接相连。应将它们分开，或用适当的连接词连接。

× Also when I meet a disabled person, I should give some help, give some help.

✓ Also, when I met a disabled person, I should give some help.

这段回答描述的是童年时父母教导的内容，前面的情境使用过去时“when I was a child”和“when I met”，因此这里也应使用过去时“met”，保持时态一致。重复的“give some help”可删去一次。

× The person who is plight can be popular anywhere.

✓ A person who is polite can be popular anywhere.

“plight”是名词，意为“困境”，不能在这里作形容词描述一个人。应使用形容词“polite”（有礼貌的）。

× Moreover being plight is a good manner so I think it is good so I think it is necessary to be polite.

✓ Moreover, being polite is good manners, so I think it is necessary to be polite.

“plight”是名词，不能表达“有礼貌的”；这里应使用形容词“polite”。此外，原句重复使用“so I think”，修正句删去重复部分，使表达更清楚。

× Moreover being plight is a good manner so I think it is good so I think it is necessary to be polite.

✓ Moreover, being polite is good manners, so I think it is necessary to be polite.

表示礼貌行为时，通常使用固定表达“good manners”（良好的礼仪），其中“manners”用复数。不要在此处写成“a good manner”。

× We need to be respectful no matter who they are, everyone deserves respect.

✓ We need to be respectful no matter who they are; everyone deserves respect.

逗号前后是两个可以独立成句的完整分句，只用逗号连接会造成逗号拼接错误。可以改用分号，或加上连接词“and”。