礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly by saying who taught you or what helped you learn. Your current explanation is difficult to follow, and phrases such as “mechanisms in the learn system” and “mentally methods” are unclear. Use simple, accurate vocabulary and add one specific example, such as being taught to say “please” and “thank you.”

範例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was young. They reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they praised me when I used good manners. If I was rude, they explained why my words might hurt someone.

建議: State your opinion clearly, then explain one or two benefits. The ideas about society and behavior are relevant, but “be a usual” and “better than the normal” are unnatural and unclear. Try phrases such as “create a more pleasant society” or “make communication smoother.”

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people communicate respectfully. When people use good manners, disagreements are less likely to become arguments. It also makes everyday interactions more pleasant.

建議: Name specific occasions rather than describing general “communication systems.” Give a direct answer and support it with examples, such as speaking to older people, meeting someone new, or interacting with service workers. Avoid repeating the same idea at the end.

範例: We should be polite in almost every situation, especially when meeting someone for the first time or speaking to older people. We should also use good manners with service workers, even if we are in a hurry. A friendly tone and a simple “please” or “thank you” can make a big difference.

建議: Describe your own behavior in the past, using “I” and past-tense verbs. Your answer currently sounds like instructions or a reward-and-punishment rule, so it does not clearly explain what you did. Give one concrete example, such as helping at home or speaking respectfully, and avoid unfinished phrases.

範例: As a child, I tried to show politeness by greeting adults and speaking to them respectfully. I also said “please” when asking for something and thanked my parents when they helped me. At home, I sometimes helped set the table without being asked.

× There are two types of mechanisms in in the learn system in psych analysis and 1st 1 is a umm punishment and second one is umm mentally uh methods so you can use.

✓ There are two types of mechanisms in the learning system in psychoanalysis. The first one is punishment, and the second one is mental methods that you can use.

In this context, learning modifies system, so use the -ing form learning rather than learn. The phrase mentally methods is corrected separately because mentally is an adverb, not an adjective.

× There are two types of mechanisms in in the learn system in psych analysis and 1st 1 is a umm punishment and second one is umm mentally uh methods so you can use.

✓ There are two types of mechanisms in the learning system in psychoanalysis. The first one is punishment, and the second one is mental methods that you can use.

Use the before second one when referring to the second item in a specific pair. The first one also needs to be expressed as a phrase parallel to the second one.

× There are two types of mechanisms in in the learn system in psych analysis and 1st 1 is a umm punishment and second one is umm mentally uh methods so you can use.

✓ There are two types of mechanisms in the learning system in psychoanalysis. The first one is punishment, and the second one is mental methods that you can use.

Mentally is an adverb, but it describes a verb or adjective. Because the word describes the noun methods, use the adjective mental.

× Yeah, if umm all the people are being polite, umm, the societies can umm be a usual and umm world behaviors and can be better than the normal.

✓ Yeah, if all people are polite, societies can be normal, and people's behavior can be better than normal.

Usual does not fit the construction be a usual, and a cannot be used before an adjective in this way. The revised sentence uses normal as a subject complement and expresses the comparison naturally.

× Yeah, if umm all the people are being polite, umm, the societies can umm be a usual and umm world behaviors and can be better than the normal.

✓ Yeah, if all people are polite, societies can be normal, and people's behavior can be better than normal.

When speaking about societies in general, do not use the definite article the. Similarly, normal is used generally here, so the is unnecessary before it.

× There are lots of communication systems between the humans, for instance, uh, with words, with dialogues or umm, with behaviors.

✓ There are lots of communication systems between humans, for instance, through words, dialogue, or behavior.

Humans is used generally, so it does not need the definite article the.

× Uh, you can be polite, uh, all of them.

✓ You can be polite in all of them.

Use the preposition in to show that politeness applies within each of the communication systems mentioned.

× It's so important and can be better.

✓ It's very important, and it can make things better.

The second part of the original sentence does not clearly state what can be better. Repeating it as the subject and adding a clear object makes the sentence complete and easier to understand.

× If you can use complementary method for for instance, you can say.

✓ For instance, you can use a complementary method and say,

A singular countable noun such as method needs an article. Use a before method.

× If you you can say that if you umm can not use bad words, you I can make you a good cake.

✓ You can say, If you do not use bad words, I can make you a good cake.

The original switches from you to you I as the subject of the promise. Use I as the subject of can make because the speaker is making the cake.

× Or if you can use bad words, you can umm, you cannot go the outside for your.

✓ Or, if you use bad words, you cannot go outside.

Outside does not take the preposition to or the article the in this expression. The natural phrase is go outside.