礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答包含了“老师通过传统故事教你礼貌”这一核心观点，但表达不够清晰自然。建议直接说明学习方式，再补充故事带来的启发。注意使用正确的语法，例如用“told me stories”而不是“told me some of the stories maybe”，并避免使用不完整或不自然的句子，如“the right thing is what should I do”。另外，故事名称不清楚时，可以直接说“traditional Chinese stories”。

範例: My teacher taught me to be polite through traditional Chinese stories. For example, she told us stories about respecting our elders and helping others. These stories showed me how to behave properly in everyday life.

建議: 回答有明确观点，也给出了“有礼貌有助于交朋友”的理由，但存在冠词、搭配和句子结构问题。“important thing”前应加“an”，更自然的表达是“Politeness is very important”。“people will not make friends with someone is implied”不符合英语语法，应改为“people may not want to be friends with someone who is rude”。避免重复使用“really, really”，并使用一个清晰的结果来展开理由。

範例: Yes, definitely. I think politeness is very important because it shows respect for other people. If someone is rude, others may feel uncomfortable and may not want to become friends with them.

建議: 回答提到了父母、家人、老师和领导，但缺少完整句子、连接词和具体场合。建议先用“When we...”完整回答，再列举对象或场景，例如见到长辈、老师或领导时。此外，“meet our parents meet the family”结构重复且不清楚，可以改为“meet our parents or other family members”。

範例: We should be polite whenever we meet other people, especially our parents, teachers, and leaders. We should greet them politely, listen carefully, and use respectful language. It is also important to be polite when we are speaking to strangers or asking for help.

建議: 回答提供了“说谢谢、打招呼和微笑”等具体例子，内容方向很好，但时态和词语搭配需要改进。由于问题问的是过去，应使用“I would say”或“I used to say”，而不是“I will say”。“polite languages”不自然，应改为“polite expressions”或“polite words”；同时应使用并列连接词，使表达更流畅。

範例: As a child, I used to use polite expressions such as “thank you” and “hello.” I also greeted people by saying, “Nice to meet you,” and smiled at them. These small actions helped me show respect and friendliness.

× My teacher told me some of the stories maybe about Konoroni, some of the traditional Chinese stories to tell me how to be polite and the right thing is what should I do?

✓ My teacher told me some stories, perhaps traditional Chinese stories, that taught me how to be polite and what the right thing to do was.

原句的句子结构混乱，多个成分直接堆叠在一起，导致意思不清。可以使用 that 引导定语从句，说明这些故事的作用，使句子结构更完整、清晰。

× My teacher told me some of the stories maybe about Konoroni, some of the traditional Chinese stories to tell me how to be polite and the right thing is what should I do?

✓ My teacher told me some stories, perhaps traditional Chinese stories, that taught me how to be polite and what I should do.

在间接表达中，不能使用直接疑问句语序“what should I do”。应该使用陈述句语序“what I should do”。

× My teacher told me some of the stories maybe about Konoroni, some of the traditional Chinese stories to tell me how to be polite and the right thing is what should I do?

✓ My teacher told me some stories, perhaps traditional Chinese stories, that taught me how to be polite and what the right thing to do was.

主句使用了一般过去时“told”，所以过去发生的相关内容通常也使用过去时。“is”应改为“was”，以保持时态一致。

× Yes, of course I think being polite is really, really important thing for me because people will not make friends with someone is implied.

✓ Yes, of course. I think being polite is a really important thing for me because people will not make friends with someone who is impolite.

可数名词单数“thing”前面需要限定词。这里应使用不定冠词“a”，所以应说“a really important thing”。

× Yes, of course I think being polite is really, really important thing for me because people will not make friends with someone is implied.

✓ Yes, of course. I think being polite is a really important thing for me because people will not make friends with someone who is impolite.

“someone is implied”不是完整、正确的英语结构。这里需要用关系代词“who”连接“someone”和后面的描述，形成“someone who is impolite”。

× When we meet our parents meet the family guide or teacher or leader

✓ We should be polite when we meet our parents, family members, teachers, or leaders.

原句只是一个时间状语短语，没有完整的主语和谓语，因此不能独立成句。补充“We should be polite”后，句子就有了完整的主语和谓语。

× I will say some polite languages maybe such as the Thank you, Hello Nice to meet you or smile to everyone.

✓ I said some polite phrases, such as “Thank you,” “Hello,” and “Nice to meet you,” and smiled at everyone.

问题询问的是童年时做过什么，因此应使用一般过去时。“will say”和“smile”应分别改为过去式“said”和“smiled”。

× I will say some polite languages maybe such as the Thank you, Hello Nice to meet you or smile to everyone.

✓ I said some polite phrases, such as “Thank you,” “Hello,” and “Nice to meet you,” and smiled at everyone.

这里列举多个礼貌表达，并且补充另一个行为“smiled”，应该使用“and”表示并列，而不是“or”。

× I will say some polite languages maybe such as the Thank you, Hello Nice to meet you or smile to everyone.

✓ I said some polite phrases, such as “Thank you,” “Hello,” and “Nice to meet you,” and smiled at everyone.

英语中表示“对某人微笑”通常使用“smile at someone”，而不是“smile to someone”。修改后的“smiled at everyone”搭配正确。