礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体童年经历，但有明显的语法和搭配问题。将“introduced the friend to me”改为“introduced their friend to me”，“they encourage me”改为“they encouraged me”，并说“taught me how to shake hands”，而不是“encourage me how to”。另外，“a very special experience”较笼统，可以说明这段经历如何帮助你变得更有礼貌。建议使用“because”或“as a result”连接细节，并将答案控制在3—4句。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. When I was a child, they taught me to greet people, shake hands, and say “hello” when I was introduced to someone. I was quite shy at first, but their guidance gradually made me more confident in social situations.

建議: 观点明确，但内容中有多处听写或表达错误，影响了连贯性和理解，例如“weren't on auging”无法理解，“Learn on the way”应改为“While we were walking”，“we meet”应为“we met”，“please asked”应为“politely asked”，还需要补充“of politeness”。应先直接回答重要性，再用一个清晰的例子支持观点。建议使用“for example”和“as a result”，并明确说明礼貌能让别人更愿意提供帮助。

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and encourages people to help us. For example, when I was young, my friends and I got lost and politely asked an older man for directions. He kindly showed us the way, so I realized that good manners can make social interactions much easier.

建議: 回答提到了拜访他人家中这一合适场合，也给出了送礼的细节，但“be pleased”应改为“be polite”，“learned great his family”表达不清，可以改为“greeted his family warmly”或“thanked his family for having me”。“when I lived”不符合语境，可能想表达“when I visited”。建议先列举场合，再解释具体做法和结果，并使用“for instance”连接例子。

範例: We should be polite whenever we visit someone else’s home, especially for the first time. For instance, last month I visited my uncle and brought a small gift for his family. I also greeted everyone warmly and thanked them for inviting me, which made the visit pleasant for all of us.

建議: 答案的核心意思可以推测为“向认识的人和亲戚鞠躬问候”，但大量词语无法理解，例如“I was a tribe”“owe great limb”和“lane this”。需要使用简单、准确的句子直接描述行为，例如“bowed slightly”和“greeted them”。此外，结尾“not only...but also...”结构没有完成。建议只保留一个具体行为，再补充它表达尊重的作用，答案控制在2—3句。

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults whenever I met them. When I visited my relatives, I usually bowed slightly, said hello, and asked how they were. These simple actions showed my respect and helped me build good relationships with my family.

× I still remember clearly, my parents introduced the friend to me, but I'm very shy.

✓ I still clearly remember that my parents introduced a friend to me, but I was very shy.

这段话是在讲童年经历，所以应该使用过去时：I'm 改为 was。introduce 后面通常要用 a friend，而不是 the friend，除非前文已经提到过这个朋友。remember 后面加 that 可以连接完整从句，避免逗号直接连接两个句子。

× Then they encourage me how to shake hands and say hello.

✓ Then they encouraged me to shake hands and say hello.

故事发生在过去，encourage 应改为过去式 encouraged。表示“教某人做某事”时，常用 encourage someone to do something，因此应使用 to shake，而不是 how to shake。

× Learn on the way, we meet older man and please asked him for directions.

✓ Later, on the way, we met an older man and politely asked him for directions.

这里是在叙述过去发生的事情，所以 meet 应改为 met。单数可数名词 man 前需要冠词，应使用 an older man。修饰动词 asked 应使用副词 politely，而不是形容词或错误形式 please。Later, on the way 使句子结构更加完整、自然。

× The strange experience made me realize the importance

✓ The strange experience made me realize the importance of politeness.

importance 通常需要说明“什么的重要性”，因此后面应加 of politeness，使句子意思完整。

× I think it's necessary to be pleased when visiting someone else's home.

✓ I think it's necessary to be polite when visiting someone else's home.

pleased 表示“感到高兴的”，通常描述人的感受；这里想表达“有礼貌的”，应使用形容词 polite。

× I bought a gift and learned great his family when I lived.

✓ I bought a gift and greeted his family warmly when I arrived.

这句话描述上个月发生的事情，动词应使用过去时。表示“问候家人”应使用 greeted，而不是 learned。修饰 greeted 应使用副词 warmly，表示“热情地”；when I arrived 比 when I lived 更符合“到达叔叔家”的语境。

× This made him very happy and also made me feel extremely pleasant.

✓ This made him very happy and also made me feel extremely pleased.

pleasant 通常用来描述事物给人的感觉，例如 a pleasant experience；描述人的感受时应使用 pleased。因此这里应改为 made me feel extremely pleased。

× I was a tribe.

✓ I was polite.

tribe 是名词，意思是“部落”，不能放在 be 后面表达“有礼貌的”。这里需要使用形容词 polite。

× Whenever I met people I know or visited relatives, I owe great limb and their families to show my respect to lane this not only enemies mere recognishing but also made me understand the power of politeness

✓ Whenever I met people I knew or visited relatives, I would politely greet them and their families to show my respect. This not only made them feel respected but also helped me understand the power of politeness.

这是对过去习惯的描述，people I know 应改为 people I knew。would politely greet 表示过去经常做的事情。not only...but also... 是固定搭配，前后应连接结构相同的内容：made them feel respected 和 helped me understand。原句缺少清晰的主语、谓语和标点，因此需要拆分为两个完整句子。