礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接说明了父母是礼貌习惯的来源，也提供了具体例子，内容方向很好。但句子过长，缺少清晰的连接和结尾；“in most in every”属于明显的重复和表达中断。建议使用“mainly because”“for example”和“they also taught me”等连接词，并用完整句子说明父母如何训练你。控制在2—3句即可。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents because they placed great importance on good manners. For example, they always treated our neighbours and relatives respectfully and reminded me to say “please” and “thank you” whenever I asked for something or received help.

建議: 回答包含明确观点，也提到了“尊重他人”和“第一印象”，但语法错误和重复较多，例如“they is”“in the job interviews”“being punctual and use”“can living can make”。此外，准时更属于职业素养，不完全等同于礼貌。建议先给出观点，再用一个准确、完整的职场例子说明礼貌如何建立良好印象。

範例: Yes, definitely. Being polite shows respect for other people and helps create a positive first impression. For example, during a job interview, greeting the interviewer politely and using appropriate language can make me seem professional and considerate.

建議: 回答列举了工作面试和正式会议，观点较直接，并说明了赢得信任的原因。但“we should be applied”搭配错误，应改为“we should be polite”；“lose your profession”不符合语境，应该表达为“damage your professional reputation”；“a bunch of experts”较口语化且不够自然。建议补充日常场合，体现礼貌并不只适用于正式环境。

範例: I think we should be polite in both formal and everyday situations. It is especially important during job interviews or formal meetings because polite behaviour can help us appear professional and earn other people’s trust. We should also be courteous when speaking to service staff or elderly people.

建議: 回答给出了具体行为“说please和thank you”，与问题相关。但“especially one night in someone's help”应改为“especially when I needed someone’s help”，“the parents emphasis”应改为“my parents emphasised”。建议增加一个简单的生活场景，例如向老师、邻居或家人表达感谢，使内容更具体，同时避免重复“when I was a child”。

範例: As a child, I usually said “please” when I asked for something and “thank you” when someone helped me. I also greeted adults politely, especially my teachers and neighbours, because my parents always emphasised the importance of good manners.

× I learned to be polite mostly from my parents because they really value good manners for example they set a great example for us by treating our neighbours and relatives with respect all the time.

✓ I learned to be polite mostly from my parents because they really value good manners. For example, they set a great example for us by treating our neighbours and relatives with respect all the time.

原句把两个完整句子直接连接在一起，缺少句号或其他连接方式，导致句子结构混乱。可以用句号分开完整句子，并在“For example”后加逗号。

× And they also reminded us to say thank you and please in most in every

✓ They also reminded us to say “please” and “thank you” in almost every situation.

原句“in most in every”结构不完整且重复，句子没有表达完整意思。应改为“in almost every situation”，表示“几乎在每种情况下”。

× Being polite shows respect for others and and they is essential for leaving a good first impression.

✓ Being polite shows respect for others, and it is essential for leaving a good first impression.

“Being polite”是单数概念，应该用单数代词“it”，并搭配“is”，不能使用“they is”。此外，原句中的“and and”是重复连接词，应删除一个。

× Being punctual and use appropriate languages

✓ Being punctual and using appropriate language

“Being punctual”和“using appropriate language”是并列成分，形式应该保持一致。前者使用“-ing”形式，因此后者也应使用“using”，不能使用“use”。

× appropriate languages

✓ appropriate language

“Language”在这里表示语言表达能力或用词方式，是不可数名词，通常使用单数形式。应说“appropriate language”，而不是“appropriate languages”。

× can living can make

✓ can make

情态动词“can”后面必须接动词原形，因此应使用“can make”。“living”不能放在“can”后面，而且原句重复使用了“can”。

× We should be applied on serious occasions like a job interview or a formal meeting.

✓ We should be polite on serious occasions like a job interview or a formal meeting.

“We should be applied”错误地使用了被动语态。“Apply”通常表示“应用某物”，不能用来表达“我们应该有礼貌”。这里应直接使用形容词“polite”。

× Especially one night in someone's help or somebody did something for me.

✓ Especially when I needed someone’s help or when somebody did something for me.

原句中的“one night in someone's help”缺少正确的动词结构。因为是在回忆童年时的经历，应使用过去时“needed”，并用“when”引导时间或条件从句。

× That's what the parents emphasis on.

✓ That’s what my parents emphasized.

“Emphasis”是名词，不能作为这里的谓语动词使用。表达过去父母强调的事情时，应使用动词过去式“emphasized”。“Emphasize”本身不需要搭配“on”。