礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 「二つの理由」という表現は質問に合わず、文末の “carefree” も意味が不適切です。おそらく “to be careful when other people were speaking” または “to listen carefully when others were speaking” と言いたかったのでしょう。まず直接的な答えを述べ、その後 “They also taught me...” で具体例を追加すると、より自然で論理的になります。

範例: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and to listen carefully when other people were speaking. They also reminded me to respect older people and guests.

建議: “being bright” は “being polite” の言い間違いです。また、“because it respects it shows respect” は文法的に不自然なので、“because it shows respect for others” と簡潔に言いましょう。最後の部分は文が未完成です。理由と結果を “If you are rude, people may feel uncomfortable or offended” のように明確に述べ、2～3文で完結させてください。

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for other people. If we are rude, others may feel uncomfortable or offended. Politeness also helps us build better relationships.

建議: 質問に直接答えられており、具体例もあるため比較的よくできています。ただし、“on crowded train” は “on crowded trains” または “on a crowded train” が正しく、最後にピリオドを付けて文を完結させましょう。“For example” に続けて、なぜ声を小さくするのかを説明すると内容がさらに具体的になります。

範例: We should be polite whenever we use public transportation, especially on crowded trains. For example, we should keep our voices down so that we do not disturb other passengers. We should also give our seats to elderly or disabled people when necessary.

建議: “brightness” ではなく “politeness” を使う必要があります。また、“people people” の重複と、過去の話なのに “say” を使っている点を修正しましょう。“For example” の前に文を区切り、誰にどのように挨拶したかを明確にしてください。

範例: When I was a child, I showed my politeness by greeting people warmly. For example, I usually said hello to my teachers and friends when I saw them. I also tried to smile and use polite expressions when speaking to adults.

× They taught me to say please and thank you and two reason carefree when other people were speaking.

✓ They taught me to say please and thank you and to remain quiet when other people were speaking.

The phrase 'two reason carefree' does not form a grammatical expression. The corrected sentence uses the infinitive 'to remain' after 'taught me' and expresses the intended polite behavior clearly.

× Yes, I think being bright is very important because it respects it shows respect for others if you if you don't show respect they feel

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for others. If you do not show respect, they may feel uncomfortable.

'Bright' means intelligent or giving off light, so it is not the correct adjective here. Use 'polite' to describe respectful behavior. The repeated words and incomplete ending also make the sentence unclear.

× Yes, I think being bright is very important because it respects it shows respect for others if you if you don't show respect they feel

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for others. If you do not show respect, they may feel uncomfortable.

The original contains repeated words, an incomplete clause, and several clauses joined without proper punctuation. Separate the ideas into two complete sentences and use 'may feel uncomfortable' to complete the second conditional idea.

× We should be polite when we use public transportation, especially on crowded train.

✓ We should be polite when we use public transportation, especially on crowded trains.

The sentence refers to trains in general, so the plural noun 'trains' is needed. Alternatively, you could say 'especially on a crowded train' when referring to one train.

× When I was a child, I showed my brightness by greeting people people for example I usually say hello to teachers, my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I showed my politeness by greeting people. For example, I usually said hello to my teachers and friends.

'Brightness' does not describe polite behavior. The appropriate noun is 'politeness.' Use clear punctuation after 'people' and avoid repeating 'people.'

× When I was a child, I showed my brightness by greeting people people for example I usually say hello to teachers, my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I showed my politeness by greeting people. For example, I usually said hello to my teachers and friends.

The phrase 'When I was a child' refers to the past, so the verb should be in the simple past: 'said,' not 'say.' Keep the verbs in the same past-time frame.

× When I was a child, I showed my brightness by greeting people people for example I usually say hello to teachers, my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I showed my politeness by greeting people. For example, I usually said hello to my teachers and friends.

The nouns 'teachers' and 'friends' are items in a list, so they should be connected with 'and.' The comma between them cannot correctly join the two items.