礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答切题，也提供了父母、祖父母和老师等具体来源，但存在明显的语法和表达问题。将“they always remind me”改为过去时“they always reminded me”，并避免使用“and something and so on”这类含糊且重复的表达。可以按照“主要来源+具体例子”的结构作答，并使用“especially”和“for example”等连接词，使答案更自然。

範例: I mainly learned good manners from my parents and grandparents, although my primary school teacher also taught me some basic rules. For example, they reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” greet people politely, and say goodbye before leaving.

建議: 观点明确，但第二句和第三句有语法错误，且论证不够自然。“first impression”前应使用复数或限定词，如“first impressions are important”；“On being polite”应改为“Being polite”，“this is benefit”应改为“this is beneficial”。建议直接说明礼貌的重要性，再补充一个结果，例如帮助建立信任或让交流更顺畅。

範例: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important because it creates a good first impression and makes other people feel comfortable. It can also help us build trust and maintain positive relationships in everyday life.

建議: 回答提到了正式场合和见重要人物，但逻辑和措辞不够准确。“before facing a close friend”不符合自然表达，可以改为“when meeting close friends”；“outgoing”表示外向，不等于随意，建议使用“more relaxed”或“informal”。同时应减少“you know”和“and but”等口语填充和重复，并通过对比说明不同场合的礼貌程度。

範例: We should be especially polite in formal situations, such as job interviews, business meetings, or when meeting an important person. With close friends and relatives, we can usually be more relaxed, although we should still show basic respect.

建議: 回答给出了鞠躬、问候和道别等具体行为，但时态混乱，应该统一使用过去时：“began”“would say”“even if they were strangers”。“he or she”在这里可用更自然的复数“they”替代。建议用两句话清晰描述小时候的习惯，并避免“I will, and I”等自我纠正造成的不流畅。

範例: When I was a child, I would bow to greet my teacher before class began. I also said hello when I met people and goodbye before leaving, even if they were strangers, because my parents taught me to show respect to everyone.

× Mostly though, I learned good manners from my parents and grandparents and when I was a small child, uh, for example, they always remind me to say please and thank you or goodbye and something and so on.

✓ Mostly, though, I learned good manners from my parents and grandparents. When I was a small child, for example, they always reminded me to say please, thank you, and goodbye.

整段是在回忆童年经历，因此动词要使用过去时。将“remind”改为“reminded”，表示父母和祖父母过去经常提醒我。

× Mostly though, I learned good manners from my parents and grandparents and when I was a small child, uh, for example, they always remind me to say please and thank you or goodbye and something and so on.

✓ Mostly, though, I learned good manners from my parents and grandparents. When I was a small child, for example, they always reminded me to say please, thank you, and goodbye.

“please”“thank you”和“goodbye”是并列项目，应使用“and”连接，而不是“or”。同时，删除“and something and so on”可以避免不完整和不自然的并列。

× As we all know, first impression is very important in our daily life.

✓ As we all know, a first impression is very important in our daily life.

“first impression”是可数名词的单数形式，前面需要冠词。这里是在泛指一次初次印象，因此使用不定冠词“a”。

× On being polite can make all others feel comfortable and this is benefit for all of us.

✓ Being polite can make everyone feel comfortable, and this is beneficial for all of us.

“On being polite”不能作为这个句子的主语，应该直接使用动名词短语“Being polite”。这样句子结构完整，主语是“Being polite”。

× On being polite can make all others feel comfortable and this is benefit for all of us.

✓ Being polite can make everyone feel comfortable, and this is beneficial for all of us.

“benefit”是名词，不能放在“is”后面直接作表语来表示“有益的”。这里需要使用形容词“beneficial”，表示“有益的”。

× I think in a formal or important occasion we should be very polite before facing a close friend or some relatives.

✓ I think that on a formal or important occasion, we should be very polite, even when meeting a close friend or some relatives.

表示“在某个场合”通常使用介词“on”，所以“in a ... occasion”应改为“on a ... occasion”。

× And you can be, you know, just outgoing and but if you're meeting a very important person, then you should be extremely polite.

✓ You can be, you know, outgoing, but if you're meeting a very important person, then you should be extremely polite.

“and but”不能同时连接两个分句。这里表示转折，应保留“but”，并删除多余的“and”。

× I bowed to greet my teacher before the class begins, and I will, and I said goodbye and hello to everyone, even he or she is a stranger.

✓ I bowed to greet my teacher before the class began, and I said goodbye and hello to everyone, even if he or she was a stranger.

问题描述的是童年时的行为，因此“begins”应改为过去式“began”。同样，“is”应改为“was”，以保持过去时间的一致性。

× I bowed to greet my teacher before the class begins, and I will, and I said goodbye and hello to everyone, even he or she is a stranger.

✓ I bowed to greet my teacher before the class began, and I said goodbye and hello to everyone, even if he or she was a stranger.

“and I will”后面没有完整的动词或意义，造成句子结构不完整。删除这个多余部分后，两个过去时动作“bowed”和“said”可以正确并列。

× I bowed to greet my teacher before the class begins, and I will, and I said goodbye and hello to everyone, even he or she is a stranger.

✓ I bowed to greet my teacher before the class began, and I said goodbye and hello to everyone, even if he or she was a stranger.

“even”后面不能直接连接完整的条件分句；这里需要使用连词“even if”，表示“即使”。