礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear topic sentence first, then add one or two specific examples. Correct the pronoun error by changing “he” to “she,” and use linking punctuation or words to separate your ideas. For example, say “My mother taught me...” and connect the examples with “For instance.”

範例: My mother taught me to be polite from an early age. She encouraged me to treat others the way I wanted to be treated and always emphasized good manners. For instance, I learned to say “please” and “thank you” and to listen carefully when other people were speaking.

建議: This is a well-organized and natural answer with a direct opinion, reasons, and a relevant example. To make it slightly more concise and natural, replace “shows respect and that you are well brought up” with “shows respect and good manners.” Avoid listing too many examples when one or two are sufficient.

範例: Yes, definitely. Being polite shows respect and good manners, and it helps people form a positive impression of you. For example, saying “please” and “thank you” can make conversations more pleasant and prevent misunderstandings.

建議: The answer gives a clear opinion and explanation, but correct “disgreements” to “disagreements,” “everyone have” to “everyone has,” and “their own statement” to the more natural “their own opinions.” Improve coherence by avoiding the long final sentence and using a clearer linking phrase such as “This is especially important because...”

範例: I think we should be polite in every situation, especially when meeting new people or having disagreements. Staying respectful helps everyone express their opinions calmly and maintain good relationships. This is important because everyone has the right to share their views, even when others disagree.

建議: The answer includes several specific and relevant examples, but keep the verb tense consistently in the past: change “smile” to “smiled,” “say” to “said,” and “help” to “helped.” Also, “holding doors or bags” would be more natural as “holding doors open or carrying their bags.”

範例: As a child, I showed politeness by smiling and saying “please” and “thank you.” I also helped adults with small tasks, such as holding doors open or carrying their bags. In addition, I always waited for people to finish speaking before I responded.

× Ever since I was a kid my mom taught me to treat others the way I would like to be treated so he always emphasized good manners and respect for example she encouraged me to say please and thank you and to listen politely when someone else was speaking.

✓ When I was a kid, my mom taught me to treat others the way I would like to be treated, so she always emphasized good manners and respect. For example, she encouraged me to say please and thank you and to listen politely when someone else was speaking.

The pronoun he does not agree with the noun mom, which refers to a female person. Use she and her when referring to your mother. Also, the correction uses commas and full stops to separate the ideas clearly.

× Ever since I was a kid my mom taught me to treat others the way I would like to be treated so he always emphasized good manners and respect for example she encouraged me to say please and thank you and to listen politely when someone else was speaking.

✓ When I was a kid, my mom taught me to treat others the way I would like to be treated, so she always emphasized good manners and respect. For example, she encouraged me to say please and thank you and to listen politely when someone else was speaking.

The original sentence joins several complete ideas without sufficient punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Divide the ideas into two sentences and use a comma before so when it connects two independent clauses. Starting with When I was a kid also fits the past-time context more naturally than Ever since I was a kid.

× I think we should be polite on any occasion, whether in everyday situations like meeting friends or during disgreements. Staying respectful allows people to express their opinions calmly and helps maintain good relationships even when you disagree because everyone have the right to express their own statement.

✓ I think we should be polite on any occasion, whether in everyday situations like meeting friends or during disgreements. Staying respectful allows people to express their opinions calmly and helps maintain good relationships even when you disagree because everyone has the right to express their own statement.

Everyone is grammatically singular, so it must be followed by the singular verb has, not the plural verb have. Remember that indefinite pronouns such as everyone, someone, and nobody take singular verbs.

× As a child, I didn't know many polite phrases, so I usually smile and say please and thank you. I often help adults with small tasks like holding doors or bags and I always let people finish what they were saying before I spoke.

✓ As a child, I didn't know many polite phrases, so I usually smiled and said please and thank you. I often helped adults with small tasks like holding doors or bags, and I always let people finish what they were saying before I spoke.

The answer describes repeated actions in the past, so the main verbs should be in the simple past tense: smiled, said, and helped. The verb let has the same form in the present and past tense, so it does not change. Use past tense consistently when describing childhood habits.