礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: This is a clear, natural, and well-organized answer. You directly answer the question and support your ideas with specific examples from home and school. The linking word “but most importantly” is effective. To improve further, you could use slightly more varied vocabulary instead of repeating “polite/politeness,” although the answer is already highly effective.

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. My parents taught me to use expressions like “please,” “thank you,” and “excuse me,” while also setting a good example in their interactions with other people. At school, we were expected to listen carefully and wait our turn, so these habits gradually became part of my everyday behavior.

建議: Your answer has a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but “speaking in a considerable tongue” is unnatural and unclear. You could say “speaking in a considerate way,” “choosing your words carefully,” or “speaking respectfully.” Also, “reading people properly” is somewhat vague; explain that it means understanding their feelings or reacting appropriately. These changes would make the answer more precise and natural.

範例: Yes, I think politeness is extremely important, although it does not mean being overly formal. It helps everyday interactions go more smoothly because choosing our words carefully can prevent misunderstandings and unnecessary tension. In addition, polite people often make a better first impression and are easier to communicate with.

建議: You answer the question directly and provide appropriate examples. Correct “politenes” to “politeness,” and add commas in “at a bank, in a restaurant, or during a job interview.” The phrase “like in a bank” would be more natural as “such as at a bank.” You could also explain why politeness is important in one of these situations, which would make the answer more specific.

範例: We should be polite in almost every situation, especially when dealing with people we do not know well, such as at a bank, in a restaurant, or during a job interview. In these settings, polite language shows respect and helps create a comfortable atmosphere. With close friends, we can speak more casually, but we should still avoid being rude.

建議: This is a natural and well-supported response with several specific childhood examples. The final sentence adds honesty and makes the answer sound conversational. For slightly better fluency, connect the last sentence more smoothly with the previous idea, for example, “Although, to be honest, I didn’t always succeed.” You could also mention saying “excuse me” or offering help as another relevant example.

範例: As a child, I showed politeness in several simple ways. I greeted adults whenever I visited someone’s home, thanked people for food or gifts, and said “excuse me” when I needed to interrupt. I also tried to stay quiet while older people were speaking, although, to be honest, I did not always succeed.

× Politeness helps daily life run more smoothly because small things like reading people properly or speaking in a considerable tongue can prevent a lot of unnecessary tension.

✓ Politeness helps daily life run more smoothly because small things like reading people properly or speaking in a considerate tone can prevent a lot of unnecessary tension.

Considerable means large or important, so it does not correctly describe the manner of speaking here. Use considerate to describe speech that shows thoughtfulness toward other people, or use the natural expression speaking in a considerate tone.

× Although to be honest, I didn't always manage to do that perfectly.

✓ To be honest, I didn't always manage to do that perfectly.

Although is a subordinating conjunction that introduces a dependent clause and normally needs a main clause to complete the meaning. Here, the sentence already expresses a complete idea, so although should be removed. To be honest is the appropriate introductory phrase.