礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答抓住了“父母和老师教育我”这一核心，但存在明显语法和用词问题，且因果关系表达不清。应直接说明学习礼貌的方式，例如父母示范、提醒我使用礼貌用语，并用“because”或“so”连接结果。注意使用过去时： “there were,” “told,” “would be scolded”；“learn to be polite”中要保留“to”。建议控制在2—3句，避免重复“parents or teachers”。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they reminded me to respect other people. If I behaved rudely, they explained why it was wrong.

建議: 观点明确，但第二句几乎无法理解，且“be applied to”应改为“be polite to”或“show respect to”。“over parents”等表达错误，应使用“our parents, teachers, classmates and neighbours”。最后一句不完整。建议给出一个具体结果，例如礼貌能帮助人们建立良好关系，并避免冲突；使用“because”使理由更连贯。

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important, especially in modern society. We should be polite to our parents, teachers, classmates and neighbours because respectful behaviour helps us build good relationships. It can also prevent unnecessary conflicts.

建議: 回答提到了与长辈交流这一场合，但内容没有完成，重复使用“be applied”，并有较多停顿。应使用“when we should be polite”或直接说“We should be polite when...”。至少提供两个具体场合，例如第一次见面、请求帮助或与长辈交谈，并用“also”连接。

範例: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially older people such as our parents, grandparents and teachers. We should also use polite language when meeting someone for the first time or asking for help. For example, we can greet people and say “please” and “thank you.”

建議: 回答提供了两个合适的例子：打招呼和礼貌地寻求帮助，但结尾未完成，且“someone I familiar with”应改为“someone I was familiar with”或更自然的“someone I knew”。建议使用过去时，并补充具体礼貌用语或结果；用“Also”连接两个行为，避免句子拖尾。

範例: As a child, I usually greeted people I knew by saying hello when I saw them. I also said “please” when I needed help and “thank you” after someone helped me. These small habits showed that I respected other people.

× They were many ways for me to learn be polite.

✓ There were many ways for me to learn to be polite.

表示“有很多方法”时应使用“There be”结构，而不是“They were”。因为“ways”是复数，所以使用“There were”。

× They were many ways for me to learn be polite.

✓ There were many ways for me to learn to be polite.

“learn”后面接不定式时应使用“learn to do”，所以应改为“learn to be polite”。

× My parents and teacher often told me to behave well.

✓ My parents and teachers often told me to behave well.

“parents”是复数，表示不止一位老师时，“teacher”也应使用复数形式“teachers”。

× If I'm implied I will be scolded by my parents or teachers.

✓ If I was impolite, I would be scolded by my parents or teachers.

整段是在描述童年经历，因此条件句应使用过去时。这里用“If I was...，I would...”表示过去可能发生的情况。

× If I'm implied I will be scolded by my parents or teachers.

✓ If I was impolite, I would be scolded by my parents or teachers.

“implied”表示“被暗示的”，不符合句意。这里要表达“不礼貌”，应使用形容词“impolite”。

× We should be applied to over parents, over teachers, over classmates, over neighborhoods, and so on.

✓ We should be polite to our parents, teachers, classmates, neighbors, and so on.

“applied”表示“被应用的”，不能表示“礼貌的”。表达“对某人有礼貌”应使用“be polite to someone”。

× We should be applied to over parents, over teachers, over classmates, over neighborhoods, and so on.

✓ We should be polite to our parents, teachers, classmates, neighbors, and so on.

表达对某人礼貌时，正确搭配是“polite to”，不能使用“over”。

× We should be applied to over parents, over teachers, over classmates, over neighborhoods, and so on.

✓ We should be polite to our parents, teachers, classmates, neighbors, and so on.

“parents”前需要使用物主代词“our”，表示“我们的父母”。

× Being polite is very.

✓ Being polite is very important.

“very”通常用来修饰形容词或副词，不能单独放在系动词“is”后面。这里应补充形容词“important”。

× There are many situations we should, uh, be applied like, uh, when we speak to over older generations.

✓ There are many situations when we should be polite, such as when we speak to older generations.

原句的“situations”后面缺少清晰的连接结构，而且“be applied”不能表达“有礼貌”。可以用“when”连接情况，并使用“be polite”。

× There are many situations we should, uh, be applied like, uh, when we speak to over older generations.

✓ There are many situations when we should be polite, such as when we speak to older generations.

“applied”不是“有礼貌”的意思。此处应使用形容词“polite”，构成“should be polite”。

× When we speak to over older generations, like over parents, grandparents or teachers.

✓ When we speak to older generations, such as our parents, grandparents, or teachers.

“speak to”后面直接接人，不需要再使用“over”。列举例子时可以使用“such as”。

× Like over parents, grandparents or teachers.

✓ Such as our parents, grandparents, or teachers.

“parents”前应使用物主代词“our”，表示“我们的父母”。

× We should be applied.

✓ We should be polite.

“applied”表示“被应用的”，不能表示人的礼貌程度。这里应使用形容词“polite”。

× And umm, when we meet, uh.

✓ We should be polite when we meet them.

原句只有时间从句“when we meet”，缺少完整的主句，因此句子结构不完整。应补充主句，并用“them”指代前面提到的人。

× When I met someone I familiar with, I often said hello to them to show my politeness.

✓ When I met someone I was familiar with, I often said hello to them to show my politeness.

描述过去熟悉的状态时，需要使用过去时“was familiar”。“I familiar with”缺少系动词“was”。

× When I needed help I often asked them politely and.

✓ When I needed help, I often asked them politely.

句末的“and”没有连接后续内容，导致句子结构不完整。没有后续并列内容时，应删除“and”。