礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，但语法错误较多，影响清晰度。应直接说明“主要通过老师、父母和书本学习礼貌”，并使用正确的过去时，例如“learned”和“told us”。另外，“learn played”表达错误，应该说“learn about politeness”或“learn how to be polite”。可以补充一个具体行为，如说“please”和“thank you”，使答案更完整。

範例: When I was a child, I learned how to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you” and to respect other people. I also learned about good manners from books and stories.

建議: 观点明确，也给出了原因，但句子结构混乱，存在重复和不自然表达。“our people should be trusted for each other”应改为“people should trust and respect one another”；“we be polite”应改为“being polite”。建议使用“because... As a result...”连接观点和结果，并具体说明礼貌如何帮助建立关系或获得机会。

範例: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important because it shows respect and helps people trust one another. In addition, polite people are more likely to make friends and build positive relationships at school or at work.

建議: 答案太短且内容不完整，虽然提到了聚会，但没有清楚回答“哪些场合”。应先概括说明我们在大多数社交场合都应保持礼貌，然后列举具体场景，例如参加聚会、与长辈交谈、在学校或工作中交流。注意避免使用不完整的句子和模糊的“or some”。

範例: We should be polite in almost all social situations, especially when we meet new people or attend a formal event. For example, at a party, we should greet the host, listen to others, and avoid interrupting them. We should also be respectful when speaking to older people.

建議: 回答中有帮助老人的想法，但时态和句型错误较多。“I show”应改为过去时“I showed”，“I will”不适合描述童年经历；“give some help for old people”应改为“help elderly people”。建议用一个清晰的过去时句子直接回答，并补充具体行为，例如打招呼、让座或帮忙提东西。

範例: As a child, I showed my politeness by greeting older people and offering to help them. For example, I sometimes carried their bags or gave up my seat to them on the bus. I also tried to speak respectfully when talking to adults.

× When I was a child I needed to learn played from school and the book and teacher will tell us how to be polite.

✓ When I was a child, I learned from school, books, and teachers how to be polite, and my teachers told us how to behave politely.

问题描述的是童年时期的经历，因此相关动词应使用过去时。原句中的“will tell”是将来时，应改为过去时“told”。另外，“played”不能放在“learn”后面表达“学习如何有礼貌”，应改为“learned how to be polite”。

× When I was a child I needed to learn played from school and the book and teacher will tell us how to be polite.

✓ When I was a child, I learned how to be polite at school and from books and teachers. My teachers told us how to behave politely.

原句包含多个成分，但连接方式混乱，如“learn played from school”和“the book and teacher”。应使用“learn how to be polite”表示“学习如何有礼貌”，并用清晰的句子结构表达信息。

× Yes, I think being polite is very important because nowadays our people should be trusted for each other and we be we be polite can make more friends and get more chances.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because nowadays people should trust each other, and being polite can help us make more friends and get more opportunities.

“people should be trusted for each other”使用了不合适的被动语态。这里想表达“人们应该互相信任”，主语people主动进行trust这个动作，所以应使用主动语态“people should trust each other”。

× Yes, I think being polite is very important because nowadays our people should be trusted for each other and we be we be polite can make more friends and get more chances.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because nowadays people should trust each other, and being polite can help us make more friends and get more opportunities.

“trusted for each other”中的介词“for”使用错误。表达“互相”时应使用“each other”，不需要在它前面使用“for”。

× Yes, I think being polite is very important because nowadays our people should be trusted for each other and we be we be polite can make more friends and get more chances.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because nowadays people should trust each other, and being polite can help us make more friends and get more opportunities.

原句中“we be we be polite”出现重复和不完整结构，导致句子无法正确表达意思。应将其改为完整主语“being polite”，并使用“can help us make...”构成清楚的句子。

× MMM some occasions such as the big parties or some. We should be polite.

✓ On some occasions, such as at big parties, we should be polite.

“some occasions such as the big parties or some”不是完整句子，且“or some”没有完整意义。应把例子和主要观点合并成一个完整句子：“On some occasions, such as at big parties, we should be polite.”

× I show my politeness as a child is that I will. I can talk and give some help for old people.

✓ I showed my politeness as a child by talking to and helping old people.

问题询问的是你小时候做过什么，因此应使用过去时。“show”应改为“showed”。此外，“I will”是将来时，不适合描述过去的经历；改为“by talking to and helping”可以清楚地说明当时的做法。

× I show my politeness as a child is that I will. I can talk and give some help for old people.

✓ I showed my politeness as a child by talking to and helping old people.

介词“by”后面通常接动词的-ing形式，表示“通过做某事”。因此应使用“by talking to and helping”，而不是直接使用“I can talk”。

× I show my politeness as a child is that I will. I can talk and give some help for old people.

✓ I showed my politeness as a child by talking to and giving some help to old people.

“give help”后面表示帮助的对象时应使用介词“to”，所以“give some help for old people”应改为“give some help to old people”。更自然的表达是“helping old people”。

× I show my politeness as a child is that I will. I can talk and give some help for old people.

✓ As a child, I showed my politeness by talking to and helping old people.

原句“I show my politeness as a child is that...”包含多余的“is that”，并且后面的“I will. I can...”被错误地分成了不完整的句子。可以使用“As a child, I showed... by...”组成结构完整、自然的句子。