礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答与问题相关，但有较多词汇和语法错误，影响理解。例如，“flawed”应改为“polite”或“good manners”，“as a children”应改为“as children”，“political”应改为“polite”，“why was in my class”应改为“when I was in primary school”。答案在“say hello with the”处中断，导致内容不完整。建议先直接说明主要来源，再补充一个具体例子，并使用“for example”连接细节。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. When I was a child, my teacher often reminded us to greet people and say “please” and “thank you.” For example, we had to say hello whenever a teacher entered the classroom.

建議: 回答有明确观点，也尝试使用“not only...but also...”来解释原因，但句子之间缺少标点和连接，且“treat each other happily”表达不自然，“relationship per wait sociality”基本无法理解。可以改为“help people get along well”和“build stronger relationships”。建议给出一个清晰原因，再补充具体结果，避免重复两次“very important”。

範例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps people get along well. It also shows respect and makes conversations more pleasant. For example, saying “please” and “thank you” can create a friendly atmosphere at school or work.

建議: 回答试图举例，但“options which need to be deployed”不是自然表达，且后半部分难以理解。可以直接回答“在正式场合、与陌生人交流以及需要帮助时”，然后说明礼貌的作用。“for example”后面应接清晰、具体的场景；同时注意避免重复使用“each other”。

範例: We should be polite in formal situations, especially when speaking to teachers, employers, or older people. We should also use polite language when meeting someone for the first time or asking for help. For example, saying “Could you please help me?” sounds much more respectful than giving a direct order.

建議: 回答提供了两个童年行为，方向正确，但存在严重的词汇和时态问题。“say hello for other steelers”应改为“say hello to other students/people”，“in a strait”可能想表达“when I was in the street”，“take away the rubber into the bin”应改为“put rubbish in the bin”，“As you it can help me to build up”应改为“It helped me become a more considerate person”。建议使用过去时，并清楚说明这些行为体现了什么礼貌。

範例: When I was a child, I showed politeness by greeting other students and teachers. I also put my rubbish in the bin instead of leaving it on the street. These small habits showed respect for other people and helped me become more responsible.

× Because in my country learning to be flawed as a children is important.

✓ Because in my country, learning to be polite as a child is important.

“a”后面必须接单数可数名词，所以“a children”应改为“a child”。另外，根据题意，“flawed”不符合语境，表达“有礼貌”应使用“polite”。

× So why was in my class our teacher will tell us how to be political.

✓ When I was in primary school, our teacher taught us how to be polite.

这里描述的是童年时期发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。“will tell”是将来时，应改为“taught”。“political”表示“政治的”，表达“有礼貌的”应使用“polite”。

× So why was in my class our teacher will tell us how to be political.

✓ When I was in primary school, our teacher taught us how to be polite.

原句的语序混乱，缺少清晰的时间状语和主语结构。可以使用“When I was in primary school”引出背景，再用“our teacher taught us”构成完整句子。

× For example, we will learn to say hello with the

✓ For example, we learned to say hello to others.

题目询问童年经历，所以应使用一般过去时。“will learn”应改为“learned”。

× For example, we will learn to say hello with the

✓ For example, we learned to say hello to others.

表示“向某人问好”时，固定搭配是“say hello to someone”，不能使用“say hello with someone”。

× Yes, I think it's very important it not only can help us to treat each other happily but also it can build a relationship per wait sociality.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important because it can not only help us treat each other well but also help us build relationships within society.

原句把多个分句直接连接在一起，缺少清晰的连接结构。可以使用“because”连接原因，并使用“not only...but also...”构成平行结构。

× Yes, I think it's very important it not only can help us to treat each other happily but also it can build a relationship per wait sociality.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important because it can not only help us treat each other well but also help us build relationships within society.

“not only”应放在情态动词“can”之后、主要动词“help”之前，即“can not only help”。同时，两个部分应保持平行结构：“help...but also help...”。

× Yes, I think it's very important it not only can help us to treat each other happily but also it can build a relationship per wait sociality.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important because it can not only help us treat each other well but also help us build relationships within society.

“treat each other”表示“对待彼此”，通常使用副词“well”，而不是“happily”。“well”说明对待他人的方式。

× Yes, I think it's very important it not only can help us to treat each other happily but also it can build a relationship per wait sociality.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important because it can not only help us treat each other well but also help us build relationships within society.

原句缺少连接主句和原因从句的连词。这里使用“because”更合适；“not only...but also...”用于连接两个并列动作。

× I think there are so many options which need to be deployed for example why take a meeting waist through the two way should be positive with each other each other can build a relationship

✓ I think there are many occasions when we need to be polite. For example, when we take part in a meeting, we should be polite to each other because this can help us build relationships.

原句包含多个意思，但没有清楚地分成完整句子，语序也很混乱。应使用完整的主语、谓语和连接词，并将不同例子分成两个句子。

× I think there are so many options which need to be deployed for example why take a meeting waist through the two way should be positive with each other each other can build a relationship

✓ I think there are many occasions when we need to be polite. For example, when we take part in a meeting, we should be polite to each other because this can help us build relationships.

表示“参加会议”时，常用搭配是“take part in a meeting”或“attend a meeting”。表示“对彼此有礼貌”时，使用“be polite to each other”。

× When I was a child, I would say hello for other steelers.

✓ When I was a child, I would say hello to other people.

固定搭配是“say hello to someone”，所以“for”应改为“to”。

× When I was in a strait I will take away the rubber into the bin.

✓ When I was in the street, I would put rubbish in the bin.

句子描述过去的习惯，前面使用“When I was...”，后面也应使用过去形式“would put”，不能使用将来时“will take”。

× When I was in a strait I will take away the rubber into the bin.

✓ When I was in the street, I would put rubbish in the bin.

表示“把垃圾放进垃圾桶”时，应使用“put rubbish in the bin”，而不是“take...into the bin”。“in the street”也是更自然的介词搭配。

× As you it can help me to build up.

✓ As you can see, it helped me build good habits.

原句中“You”和“It”被错误地放在同一个主语位置，造成代词使用混乱。“As you can see”是固定表达，意思是“正如你所看到的”。

× As you it can help me to build up.

✓ As you can see, it helped me build good habits.

原句的结构不完整，缺少正确的谓语组合。“As you can see”构成完整的从句；后面再用“it helped me...”表达结果。