礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答切题，结构清晰，使用了“To be more specific”和“Up to now”等连接表达，细节也比较具体。可以进一步提高自然度：将“imitated their behaviors towards others”改为“followed their example”，因为前者略显生硬；“those manners”可以换成更自然的“these good manners”。此外，最后可以补充一个具体习惯，使答案更有画面感。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. I followed their example by watching how they spoke to other people, and they also taught me to say “please” and “thank you.” Over time, these good manners became a natural part of my daily life.

建議: 观点明确，理由充分，并且使用了“For example”和“What’s more”来组织内容。主要问题是“say thank you all, please”表达不自然，应改为“say ‘thank you’ and ‘please’”；“build new connections with polite people”可以改为“form new relationships with polite people”，更符合英语习惯。建议减少“people”的重复，并加入一个具体场景，例如初次见面或工作交流。

範例: Yes, definitely. Politeness is important because it helps people feel respected and comfortable, especially when they meet for the first time. Simple actions, such as saying “please,” “thank you,” and smiling, can make a very positive impression. Without basic manners, it may be difficult to build trust or maintain good relationships.

建議: 答案覆盖了家庭、学校和公共场所，内容完整，逻辑也比较清楚。不过，“occasions where”可以改为更自然的“occasions when”；“fail to behavior properly”是语法错误，应改为“fail to behave properly”。另外，第一句和后面的例子略有重复，可以直接列举场合，再说明礼貌的作用，使回答更简洁有效。

範例: We should be polite in almost every social situation, especially at home, at school, and in public places. For instance, we should listen to our parents, show respect to teachers, and be considerate of strangers on public transport. Good manners help us avoid misunderstandings and leave a positive impression on others.

建議: 回答直接，长度合适，举例具体，而且“for example”连接自然。为了让表达更地道，可以把“whenever needed”改为“when appropriate”或直接说“when someone helped me”；“elderly people”没有错误，但在这个语境中“older passengers”更具体。还可以补充主动帮助他人等另一个小例子，丰富内容。

範例: As a child, I tried to use polite words whenever someone helped me, such as saying “please” and “thank you.” I also offered my seat to older passengers on the bus, especially when they were carrying heavy bags. These were small gestures, but people often praised me for being considerate.

× However, if we fail to behavior properly, we may leave a bad impression on others.

✓ However, if we fail to behave properly, we may leave a bad impression on others.

“to”后面需要接动词原形，而“behavior”是名词，不能放在“to”后面表示“表现得”。这里应使用动词“behave”。建议记住“fail to do something”的结构，例如“fail to behave properly”。