礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，也使用了 because of 表达原因，但“when there are some big events, important events”重复且不自然。应直接说明母亲教你的具体方式，例如教你打招呼、说“please”和“thank you”。注意时态一致：过去经历应使用 taught 和 had to；“people could think”可以改为“people would see me as”。

範例: My mother taught me how to be polite when I was a child. For example, she reminded me to say “please” and “thank you” and to greet older people properly. She believed that good manners would help others see me as a respectful child.

建議: 观点明确，但例子之间缺少逻辑，而且“in every field”不如“in almost every situation”自然。“where you meet new people”应改为“when meeting new people”；“think you are a sense of responsibility”语法错误，应表达为“see you as a responsible person”。建议使用“because”连接原因，并给出礼貌带来的具体结果。

範例: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important in almost every situation because it makes people feel comfortable and respected. For instance, during a meeting or when meeting someone for the first time, polite language can help create a positive impression and show that you are responsible.

建議: 回答没有完整表达观点，出现多次重复、自我纠正和停顿，导致意思不清。“at most of the time some occasions”结构错误，“politeness may depends”也存在主谓不一致。可以先直接列出两到三个场合，再用 because 说明原因，例如正式会议、第一次见面和与老人交谈时。

範例: We should be polite in formal situations, such as job interviews, business meetings and family gatherings. It is also important when we meet someone for the first time, because good manners help us make a positive first impression. In contrast, we can usually speak more casually with close friends.

建議: 回答与问题相关，但有明显的时态、词汇和句子结构问题。“I show”应改为过去时“I showed”，“See hello”应为“say hello”，“some important one”应为“important people”。“not to say too much and being quiet”表达不完整。建议用两到三个清晰动作回答，例如问候长辈、说谢谢、认真倾听，并用具体场景补充。

範例: As a child, I showed my politeness by saying hello to adults and using polite words like “please” and “thank you.” I also tried to listen quietly when older people were speaking instead of interrupting them. My mother often praised me when I behaved this way.

× I think being polite is very important in every field, such as when you have a meeting, where you meet new people or your girlfriend or boyfriend.

✓ I think being polite is very important in every situation, such as when you have a meeting or meet new people, your girlfriend, or your boyfriend.

“every field”通常表示“每个领域”，后面不适合直接接“when”引导的情境。这里应使用“every situation”。此外，“where”通常用于引导地点关系从句，在这里应改为并列结构，使句子更清楚、完整。

× Being polite can make other people comfortable and think you are a sense of responsibility.

✓ Being polite can make other people feel comfortable and think that you are responsible.

“a sense of responsibility”是名词短语，不能放在“you are”后面表示“你是有责任心的”。描述人的特征时，应使用形容词“responsible”。另外，“make people feel comfortable”比“make people comfortable”更自然。

× At most of the time some occasions of some important or significant occasions need to be polite.

✓ On important or significant occasions, we need to be polite.

固定表达是“most of the time”，但这里谈论特定场合，应使用“on occasions”。“at most of the time”和“some occasions of some important occasions”结构不正确。

× At most of the time some occasions of some important or significant occasions need to be polite because at this time it may depend sorry our politeness may depends on

✓ We should be polite on important or significant occasions because our level of politeness may depend on the situation.

原句存在重复、语序混乱和句子未完成的问题。“occasions”不能作“need to be polite”的主语，因为真正需要保持礼貌的是“we”。应重新组织句子，使主语、谓语和原因从句完整。

× Our politeness may depends on the situation.

✓ Our level of politeness may depend on the situation.

情态动词“may”后面必须接动词原形，因此应使用“depend”，不能使用第三人称单数形式“depends”。

× In most situations I show my politeness as a child.

✓ In most situations, I showed my politeness as a child.

“as a child”表示过去的时间，因此主要动词应使用一般过去时“showed”，而不是一般现在时“show”。

× I show my politeness by See hello to someone some important one and not to say too much and being quiet.

✓ I showed my politeness by saying hello to someone important, not saying too much, and staying quiet.

介词“by”后面应接动名词，所以“See”应改为“saying”。为了保持并列结构，后面的动作也应使用-ing形式：“saying,” “not saying,” 和“staying”。

× I show my politeness by See hello to someone some important one and not to say too much and being quiet.

✓ I showed my politeness by saying hello to someone important, not saying too much, and staying quiet.

“someone some important one”语序和结构不完整，应改为“someone important”。同时，整句需要使用平行结构列出表达礼貌的几种方式，这样句子才完整、清晰。