礼貌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答的核心意思可以理解，但有较多词汇和语法错误，影响表达清晰度。例如，“learned a poet”应改为“learned to be polite”，“how to greetings”应改为“how to greet”，而“scenes”在这里没有意义。建议先直接回答学习礼貌的来源，再补充父母和老师教你的具体行为，并使用“especially”和“for example”等连接词。

範例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. They taught me to greet my neighbours, say “please” and “thank you,” and show respect to older people. These habits became part of my daily life at primary and secondary school.

建議: 回答有明确观点，也尝试解释原因，但“cultivate the good sense of politeness”表达不自然，“have meetings with my future boss or great companies”逻辑不够准确。建议说明礼貌能够建立良好的人际关系，并用一个具体结果支持观点，例如更容易获得他人的信任。避免为了使用复杂词汇而造成不自然表达。

範例: Yes, I think being polite is very important. It helps us build good relationships and makes other people feel respected. For example, if I am polite during a job interview, the interviewer may see me as professional and trustworthy.

建議: 回答基本回应了问题，但“new population”应改为“new people”，“entry of the office”应改为“enter the office”，“a simple greetings”应改为“a simple greeting”。建议列出两个清晰场合，并分别说明应采取的礼貌行为，例如初次见面时打招呼、进入办公室时向同事问候。

範例: We should be polite when we meet new people or enter a workplace. For instance, we should greet people with a smile when we meet them for the first time. At the office, it is also important to say hello to our colleagues and show respect to our boss.

建議: 回答内容直接，并提供了具体例子，但时态不一致。“In my child”应改为“when I was a child”，“I will say”应改为“I would say”或“I used to say”。最后一句“That is the politeness for other people”不自然，可以改为“Those were simple ways of showing respect”。建议再补充一个行为，如道歉、排队或帮助别人，以丰富答案。

範例: When I was a child, I would say hello when I met new people and say “thank you” when someone helped me. I also said “sorry” if I made a mistake. These were simple ways of showing respect to other people.

× I learned a poet in a child from my teachers and parents who taught me about how to greetings to my neighbours and my friends. It changed my life, scenes, my primary schools and secondary schools.

✓ I learned to be polite as a child from my teachers and parents, who taught me how to greet my neighbours and friends. It influenced my life from primary school through secondary school.

“poet”是“诗人”，这里应使用形容词“polite”。“in a child”表达错误，应改为固定表达“as a child”，表示“小时候”。“how to greetings”错误，因为“how to”后面要接动词原形，所以应改为“how to greet”。原句后半部分“my life, scenes, my primary schools and secondary schools”结构不完整、逻辑不清，因此需要重新组织句子。

× Yes, being polite is important for me to cultivate the good sense of politeness. Besides, being so polite could offer me lots of opportunities to have meetings with my future boss or great companies.

✓ Yes, being polite is important because it helps me develop a good sense of politeness. Besides, being polite can offer me many opportunities to meet my future boss or representatives of great companies.

“being polite is important for me to cultivate...”的句子结构不自然，使用“because it helps me...”可以清楚表达因果关系。“opportunities to have meetings with”结构不够准确，表达“有机会见面”时应使用“opportunities to meet”。一般性观点通常使用“can”比“could”更合适。

× When we meet a new population or just entry of the office, we should have a simple greetings to colleague or boss.

✓ When we meet new people or just enter the office, we should give a simple greeting to a colleague or a boss.

“entry”是名词，不能放在“we”后面作谓语，应使用动词“enter”。“a simple greetings”中，冠词“a”后面必须接单数名词，所以应改为“a simple greeting”。“colleague”和“boss”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词，因此应使用“a colleague or a boss”。

× In my child, I will say hello and thank you when I meet new people and be helped by others. That is the politeness for other people.

✓ As a child, I would say hello and thank you when I met new people and was helped by others. That was how I showed politeness to other people.

“In my child”不是正确表达，应改为“As a child”。因为问题询问的是童年时期的经历，整句话应使用过去时：“will”改为“would”，“meet”改为“met”。“be helped”需要与“met”保持过去时一致，并使用过去时被动形式“was helped”。“the politeness”中的“politeness”通常是不可数名词，泛指礼貌时不需要定冠词；“That is”也应改为过去时“That was”。